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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? pRaNd
Today Advertisement plays a vital role in the business sector as well as in the market sector. it is a boom not only to the consumers but also to the manufacturer as a whole. due to constantly changing preferences in consumers it is very difficult to cope with some people who are unaware of certain products that are selling in the market. while I personally say that it is very informative catalog in the advertisement. advertisement is just a piece of knowledge about the product that retailers are going to sell. They guide us about the things that prevent us from harming or other kinds of side effects. or how to use it in what direction, where it should be kept above what age it can be used etc. I disagree with the statement that people say that advertisement encourages us to buy things that they won't need it is the duty of the manufacture to grant us some knowledge about it. The changing need of the consumer they want satisfying products that give them the best result. according to their suitability and choices. the brand plays a very cute role in it they explore their product in such a way that the people get attracted towards them buy them for no use. as its very effective if you could rectify want is needed to you and whatnot. So I conclude with advertisements helps us to know about the things in detail rather than taking it for a grant. As of today we know that the johnsons company manufacture baby products, but when they made the first baby product only half of the people knows that but now it is known all over the world. it is possible due to advertisment other mass media and most vital part today like internet and shopping merchants on the internet.
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as well
as in the market sector.
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it
is a boom not
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only
to the consumers
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but
also
to the manufacturer as a whole.
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due
to
constantly
changing preferences in consumers it is
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very
difficult to cope with
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some
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people
who are unaware of certain
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products
that are selling in the market.
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while
I
personally
say that it is
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very
informative catalog in the advertisement.

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advertisement
is
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just
a piece of knowledge about the
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product
that retailers are going to sell. They guide us about the things that
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prevent
us from harming or other kinds of side effects.
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or
how to
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use
it in what direction, where it should be
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kept
above what age it can be
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used
etc. I disagree with the statement that
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people
say that advertisement encourages us to
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buy
things that they won't need it is the duty of the manufacture to grant us
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some
knowledge about it.

The changing need of the consumer they want satisfying
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products
that give them the best result.
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according
to their suitability and choices.
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the
brand plays a
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very
cute role in
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it
they explore their
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product
in such a way that the
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people
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get
attracted towards them
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buy
them for no
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use
.
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as
its
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very
effective if you could rectify want
is needed
to you and whatnot.

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So
I conclude with advertisements
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helps
us to know about the things in detail
rather
than taking it for a grant. As of
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today
we know that the
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johnsons
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company
manufacture baby
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products
,
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but
when they made the
first
baby
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product
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only
half of the
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people
knows that
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but
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now
it
is known
all over the world.
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it
is possible due to
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advertisment
other mass media and most vital part
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today
like internet and shopping merchants on the internet.
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IELTS essay Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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