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SOME SAY THAT IN ALL LEVELS OF EDUCATION TOO MUCH TIME IS SPENT LEARNING FACTS AND NOT ENOUGH ON LEARNING PRACTICAL SKILLS. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE? v.1

SOME SAY THAT IN ALL LEVELS OF EDUCATION TOO MUCH TIME IS SPENT LEARNING FACTS AND NOT ENOUGH ON LEARNING PRACTICAL SKILLS. v. 1
IT IS CONSIDERED BY SOME INDIVIDUALS THAT MANY STUDENTS AND PUPILS HAVE MORE THEORY CLASSES THAN PRACTICAL LESSONS IN EVERY EDUCATIONAL INSTITUTION. PERSONALLY, I AGREE WITH THIS VIEWPOINT BECAUSE OF THE ACADEMIC GRADING SYSTEM AND THE INCREASING NUMBER OF GRADUATES WHO TAKE UP JOBS OUTSIDE OF THEIR DISCIPLINE. FIRST OF ALL, THE METHOD OF GRADING USED IN ALL LEVELS OF SCHOOLING IS FLAWED. EDUCATION IS AN ALL-ENCOMPASSING CONCEPT, THEREFORE ITS GRADING SHOULD NOT BE BASED SOLELY ON A CRITERIUM. IF A KINEASTHETIC LEARNER IS NOT GIVEN THE OPPORTUNITY TO EXPLORE IN LEARNING USING PRACTICAL CLASSES, THIS WILL ULTIMATELY HAMPER THE PERSON'S POTENTIAL TO EXCEL IN LIFE. FOR EXAMPLE, IN AFRICA, A CHILD WHO IS ABLE TO MEMORIZE WHAT HE HAS BEEN TAUGHT IS SEEN AS SUPERIOR TO THE KID WHO CAN CREATE AND DESIGN A CONCEPT. THIS TYPE OF EVALUATION THAT ASSESSES THE ABILITY OF A LEARNER TO RECALL FACTS IS WEAK. FURTHERMORE, IT IS NO LONGER NEWS THAT MAJORITY OF GRADUATES THESE DAYS DO NOT PRACTICE WHAT THEY HAVE STUDIED IN SCHOOL. THIS IS BECAUSE MOST OF THEM DO NOT KNOW THE NITTY-GRITTY OF THEIR COURSE OF STUDY. RATHER THAN ATTENDING INTERVIEWS WHERE THEY CANNOT DEFEND THEIR SPECIALTY, THEY OPT FOR A CAREER BASED ON THE SKILLS THEY MUST HAVE ACQUIRED INFORMALLY. FOR INSTANCE, A RECENT STUDY BY OXFORD UNIVERSITY FOUND THAT 62% OF NEW GRADUATES CHOOSE JOBS OUTSIDE THEIR FIELD OF STUDY. TO CONCLUDE, I BELIEVE THAT SCHOLARS LEARN TOO MANY FACTS AS OPPOSED TO HANDS-ON EXPERIENCE IN ALL ACADEMIC INSTITUTIONS. GOVERNMENT SHOULD DO MORE TO CHANGE THIS POLICY IN EDUCATION TO ENSURE A BETTER LIFE AND ECONOMY FOR ITS CITIZENS AND THE WORLD RESPECTIVELY.
IT
IS CONSIDERED
BY
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SOME
INDIVIDUALS THAT
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MANY
STUDENTS AND PUPILS HAVE MORE THEORY CLASSES THAN PRACTICAL LESSONS IN EVERY EDUCATIONAL INSTITUTION.
PERSONALLY
, I
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AGREE
WITH THIS VIEWPOINT
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BECAUSE
OF THE ACADEMIC GRADING SYSTEM AND THE INCREASING NUMBER OF GRADUATES WHO TAKE UP JOBS
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "OUTSIDE".
OUTSIDE OF
THEIR DISCIPLINE.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
FIRST OF ALL
, THE METHOD OF GRADING
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USED
IN ALL LEVELS OF SCHOOLING
IS FLAWED
. EDUCATION IS AN ALL-ENCOMPASSING CONCEPT,
THEREFORE
Did you mean "it's" (="it is") instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
ITS
GRADING SHOULD NOT
BE BASED
SOLELY
ON A
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CRITERIUM
. IF A
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KINEASTHETIC
LEARNER IS NOT
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GIVEN
THE OPPORTUNITY TO EXPLORE IN LEARNING
If 'LEARNING' is used as a verb, it usually requires the infinitive: "to use".
USING
PRACTICAL CLASSES, THIS WILL
ULTIMATELY
HAMPER THE PERSON'S POTENTIAL TO EXCEL IN LIFE.
FOR EXAMPLE
, IN AFRICA, A CHILD WHO IS ABLE TO MEMORIZE WHAT HE HAS
BEEN TAUGHT
IS
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
SEEN
AS SUPERIOR TO THE KID WHO CAN CREATE AND DESIGN A CONCEPT. THIS TYPE OF EVALUATION THAT ASSESSES THE ABILITY OF A LEARNER TO RECALL FACTS IS WEAK.

FURTHERMORE
, IT IS NO LONGER NEWS THAT MAJORITY OF GRADUATES THESE DAYS DO NOT PRACTICE WHAT THEY HAVE STUDIED IN SCHOOL. THIS IS
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
BECAUSE
MOST OF THEM DO NOT KNOW THE NITTY-GRITTY OF THEIR COURSE OF STUDY.
RATHER
THAN ATTENDING INTERVIEWS WHERE THEY CANNOT DEFEND THEIR SPECIALTY, THEY OPT FOR A CAREER BASED ON THE
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
SKILLS
THEY
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
MUST
HAVE ACQUIRED
INFORMALLY
.
FOR INSTANCE
, A RECENT STUDY BY OXFORD UNIVERSITY FOUND THAT 62% OF NEW GRADUATES CHOOSE JOBS OUTSIDE THEIR FIELD OF STUDY.

TO CONCLUDE
, I BELIEVE THAT SCHOLARS LEARN TOO
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
MANY
FACTS AS OPPOSED TO HANDS-ON EXPERIENCE IN ALL ACADEMIC INSTITUTIONS.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
GOVERNMENT
SHOULD DO MORE TO
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
CHANGE
THIS POLICY IN EDUCATION TO ENSURE A BETTER LIFE AND ECONOMY FOR ITS CITIZENS AND THE WORLD
RESPECTIVELY
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay SOME SAY THAT IN ALL LEVELS OF EDUCATION TOO MUCH TIME IS SPENT LEARNING FACTS AND NOT ENOUGH ON LEARNING PRACTICAL SKILLS. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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