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Some poeple think that teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility.

Some poeple think that teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. VBKAK
The present generation humans feel that adolescent age is the most joyful period of life. However, most people believed that in adulthood age happiest time of life. This easy, teenage child is most dependency and exploration of the world. Whereas, adults are also some dependability but these age have some responsibility.  On the other hand adolescent agr have more time to spend with their families and friendly. At this age they don't have full rights to do work. So they are undertaken of his parent's. The adolescent life cycle diversity depends up on his family. For example competition, development, games, academic excellence etc. This is because at this point, they are being cared for by others. So, Parents are monitoring the adolescent age group. On the other hand, adulthood age have more happiest time as well as spend long time with their friendly. This is the age of golden peroid for adults. Should maintain good life and communication skills have to improve. So many adulthood are damaging their life. For example, in one family father and mother both are busy in their business as well as some other work. Couldn't watch the things done by their sons at the time of adulthood age. So, in adulthood age parents has to be aware of the things done by their children. In conclusion, both ages (adulthood, adolescent ) are golden time to live in good path. According to my view both ages have happiest time, we should utilize that government should give guide line sto tye parent maintqi his children life.
The present generation humans feel that
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adolescent
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age
is the most joyful period of
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life
.
However
, most
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people
believed that in adulthood
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age
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happiest
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time
of
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life
. This easy, teenage child is most dependency and exploration of the world. Whereas, adults are
also
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some
dependability
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but
these
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age
have
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some
responsibility.  On the
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other
hand
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adolescent
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agr
have more
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time
to spend with their families and friendly. At this
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age
they don't have full rights to do work.
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So
they are undertaken of his parent's. The
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adolescent
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life
cycle diversity depends up on his family.
For example
competition, development, games, academic excellence etc. This is
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because
at this point, they are
being cared
for by others.
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So
, Parents are monitoring the
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adolescent
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age
group. On the
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other
hand, adulthood
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age
have
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more happiest
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time
as well
as spend long
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time
with their friendly. This is the
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age
of golden
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peroid
for adults. Should maintain
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good
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life
and communication
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skills
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have to
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improve
.
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So
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many adulthood
are damaging their
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life
.
For example
, in one family father and mother both are busy in their business
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as well as
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some
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other
work. Couldn't
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watch
the things done by their sons at the
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time
of adulthood
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age
.
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So
, in adulthood
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age
parents
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has to
be aware of the things done by their children.
In conclusion
, both
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ages
(adulthood,
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adolescent
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)
are golden
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time
to
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live
in
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good
path. According to my view both
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ages
have
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happiest
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time
, we should utilize that
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government
should give guide line
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sto
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tye
parent
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maintqi
his children
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life
.
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IELTS essay Some poeple think that teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility.

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