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In some countries crime in movies and in television series increases

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Violence in movies and television has always been a pressing issue for most countries. a number of people claim that the government should regulate the amount of disturbance in films and on TV to reduce the rate of crime in society. I agree that it would undoubtedly be easier to garner support for such a move, on the contrary solely adopting such a policy will do tiny to effect social change. People criticize violence in cinema for various reasons. First and foremost, they think that it influences the mental state of the children. Kids try to imitate the same behavior they see in movies and TV. For example, the heroes in films or TV receive rewards for using violence to solve a situation. Therefore, children might believe that this is the right way to solve problems related to their everyday life. As a result of that, they indulge in various problematic situations. On the other hand, there are many movies and television series that contain violence, on the contrary still got much appreciated in society due to the fact they have so much substance, and offer a number of extremely essential life lessons. For instance, The godfather, is considered as the one of the greatest movies of all time. Although, The movie is an entertaining gangster saga, but it is also a story about power, family, and capitalism. It has so much substance, and it offers some immensely critical life lessons. In conclusion, showing violence in movies and on television is not completely responsible for crime in society. So, I believe that the government should take other measures such as gun and drug control laws to regulate and monitor violent contents in television and movies to reduce the crime rates.
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much substance, and offer a number of
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, The godfather,
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as the one of the greatest
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of all time. Although, The
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is an entertaining gangster saga,
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, showing
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is not completely responsible for crime in society.
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government
should take other measures such as gun and drug control laws to regulate and monitor violent contents in
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and
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to
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reduce
the crime rates.
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IELTS essay In some countries crime in movies and in television series increases

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