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Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Other’s, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both viewa and give your opinion

Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Other’s, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both viewa and give your opinion E37JB

There are many animals on earth but, we look so little. For instance, just look animals in country and looks zoo. Some people think that zoo are cruel and should be closed down. Other, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Firstly, most zoo parks in order to train animals beat, and to suppress gives drug. Its very bad. Sometime, it may kill the animal. Even though, it affect of animal natural character. Secondly, the zoo protects and reproduces endangered animals. For instance, Chinese zoo. There is reproduce panda. And first knows animal to children. The capital city child couldn’t ever going countryside. There children looks only zoo. Thirdly, in my view, we need a better legal for zoo. If we can, animal rights are not violated and the need of children are not limited

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Secondly
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