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Some people believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime, while others feel that crime is being tackled effectively . Discuss both sides and give your own opinion .

Some people believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime, while others feel that crime is being tackled effectively. jR8mp
Like sun, water, religion, love, even crime has been a part of this world for centuries. Many believe that more should be done to prevent it; while others are satisfied by the way crime is handled. In my opinion, more actions should be taken to prevent it. Every day millions of theft, murder, rape, and harassment are reported. thousands of people feel unsafe leaving their house past midnight or going out alone in dark. In developing and under-developed countries it takes days or months or even years to find out the culprit. This indicates the more action needs to be taken to restrain crime. for instance, nearly 32, 559 rape cases, approximately 28000 murder cases, and around and 675000 theft cases were reported in 2019 in India. With increasing development, the crime rate is constantly declining in many countries, which shows that measures are been taken to avert crime. For example, there was an overall drop in the crime rate by 15% in 2020 in Dehli, India. Additionally, the crime rate is very low in developed countries like North America, Canada, United Kingdom, France, etc, and these cities are safe even past midnight. Although this shows that the crime rate is being tackled effectively, I still believe that more effort is required by many countries to inhibit mishappenings. In conclusion, little more strong action and strict laws can make cities safe to a great extent. it can give men and women freedom to go out alone in public without the fear of being robbed or raped.
Like sun, water, religion,
love
, even
crime
has been a part of this world for centuries.
Many
believe that more should
be done
to
prevent
it; while others
are satisfied
by the way
crime
is handled
. In my opinion, more actions should
be taken
to
prevent
it.

Every day millions of theft, murder, rape, and harassment
are reported
.

thousands
of
people
feel unsafe leaving their
house
past midnight or going out alone in dark. In developing and under-developed
countries
it takes days or months or even years to find out the culprit. This indicates the more action needs to
be taken
to restrain
crime
.
for
instance,
nearly
32, 559 rape cases, approximately 28000 murder cases, and around and 675000 theft cases
were reported
in 2019 in India.

With increasing development, the
crime
rate
is
constantly
declining in
many
countries
, which
shows
that measures
are been
taken to avert
crime
.
For example
, there was an
overall
drop in the
crime
rate
by 15% in 2020 in
Dehli
, India.
Additionally
, the
crime
rate
is
very
low in developed
countries
like North America, Canada, United Kingdom, France, etc, and these cities are safe even past midnight. Although this
shows
that the
crime
rate
is
being tackled
effectively
, I
still
believe that more effort
is required
by
many
countries
to inhibit
mishappenings
.

In conclusion
,
little
more strong action and strict laws can
make
cities safe to a great extent.
it
can give
men
and women freedom to go out alone in public without the fear of
being robbed
or raped.
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IELTS essay Some people believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime, while others feel that crime is being tackled effectively.

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