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Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos

Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos epw7
Since the dawn of time, wild animals are kept in zoos all over the world. This is a controversial issue. At present, zoos are a tourist attraction in many countries and need wild animals to attract visitors. I believe that they should not be kept in zoos and there should be alternative places to see them. This essay will discuss both sides and an opinion will be put forth. There are many good reasons to not build zoos in our cities. First of all, god’s precious gifts need to live in their natural habitat. Furthermore, zoos are no place for wild things. If animals need to be cared for, they should be looked after in their natural habitat in game parks or wildlife reserves. Governments should look after the precious wild animals in their country and should close down zoos that profit for them. Another valid reason to support this view is that people can see wild animals on the internet, or in books. They don’t need to visit them in cages where they are sick or dying. Moreover, these zoos try to make money from animals' misery and they don’t care about the animals' welfare. Recent research in Harvard shows that 89% of all wild animals die in cages. In addition to this, we should allow animals to live in the wild. They can be healthy in their own habitat, they can hunt and have normal behavior. They cannot do this in a zoo. In the future, if a man wants to see wild animals, we must travel to their country and see them in the wild in their environment and not ours. In a nutshell, people believe that zoos are good places to keep wild animals, I feel that we do not need zoos anymore. We can look at wild animals on the internet or travel there and we can be happy for these wild creatures.
Since the dawn of time, wild
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animals
are
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kept
in zoos all over the world. This is a controversial issue. At present, zoos are a tourist attraction in
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many
countries and
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need
wild
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animals
to attract visitors. I believe that they should not be
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kept
in zoos and there should be alternative places to
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see
them. This essay will discuss both sides and an opinion will
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There are
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reasons to not build zoos in our cities.
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First of all
, god’s precious gifts
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need
to
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live
in their natural habitat.
Furthermore
, zoos are no place for wild things. If
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animals
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need
to
be cared
for, they should
be looked
after in their natural habitat in game parks or wildlife reserves.
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Governments
should look after the precious wild
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animals
in their country and should close down zoos that profit for them. Another valid reason to support this view is that
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people
can
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see
wild
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animals
on the internet, or in books. They don’t
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need
to visit them in cages where they are sick or dying.
Moreover
, these zoos try to
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make
money from animals'
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misery and
they don’t care about the animals' welfare. Recent research in Harvard
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shows
that 89% of all wild
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animals
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die
in cages.

In addition
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allow
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animals
to
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live
in the wild. They can be healthy in their
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own
habitat, they can hunt and have normal behavior. They cannot do this in a zoo. In the future, if a
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man
wants to
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see
wild
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animals
, we
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must
travel to their country and
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see
them in the wild in their environment and not ours.

In a nutshell,
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people
believe that zoos are
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good
places to
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keep
wild
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animals
, I feel that we do not
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need
zoos anymore. We can look at wild
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animals
on the internet or travel
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there and
we can be happy for these wild creatures.
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IELTS essay Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Others believe that there are good reasons for having zoos

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318 words
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