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Some people think that traditional culture is being damaged as it is used as a tool to make money in the tourism industry. Others think it is the only way to preserve and protect culture and tradition. Discuss and state your opinion.

Some people think that traditional culture is being damaged as it is used as a tool to make money in the tourism industry. Others think it is the only way to preserve and protect culture and tradition. Discuss and state your opinion. RyLGY
Many people today enjoy the pleasure of travelling around the world and appreciating exotic cultures and landscapes. The tourism industry generates billions of dollars each year. But this has sparked fear that traditional culture is being paid as a price. As a matter of fact, such concerns are not groundless. In pursuit of profit, local governments rush to set up more tourist attractions. Large stretches of land are being used to build amusement parks, hotels and restaurants, forcing thousands of aboriginal people out of their ancestral homes. Those who remain are often employed in the tourism industry, acting as guides for sightseers. In addition, local traditions and cultures are also under the onslaught of foreign cultures brought by the influx of tourists. Tourists bring with them their cultures and traditions which are often exotic and thus appealing. In order to appear trendy, many people start to imitate those travellers and lose interest in their own traditions. However, others believe that instead of damaging, tourism actually promotes and protects traditional culture. The daily interaction between the locals and travellers will make them more aware of their unique cultures. They often start to appreciate and cherish their own traditions because outsiders are fascinated by their seemingly ordinary way of doing things. One fails to perceive the beauty if he or she sees it every day. Tourism often highlights the local custom. Besides, tourism contributes to local revenue. Money is required to maintain buildings of historical and cultural value. Traditional industries can also be subsidized by tourism income. In a word, the way I see it, tourism can do much to promote tradition and culture. Indeed, what captivates tourists is not only the beautiful scenery but also the local traditions. Of course, everything should be done to keep the collateral damage down to a minimum.
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enjoy the pleasure of travelling around the world and appreciating exotic
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cultures
and landscapes. The
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tourism
industry generates billions of dollars each year.
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But
this has sparked fear that traditional
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culture
is
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as a price.

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local
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governments
rush to set up more
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tourist
attractions. Large stretches of land are being
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used
to build amusement parks, hotels and restaurants, forcing thousands of aboriginal
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people
out of their ancestral homes. Those who remain are
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often
employed in the
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tourism
industry, acting as guides for sightseers.
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,
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local
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traditions
and
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under the onslaught of foreign
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cultures
brought by the influx of
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.
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bring with them their
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cultures
and
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which are
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exotic and
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appealing. In order to appear trendy,
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traditions.

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instead
of damaging,
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actually promotes and protects traditional
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culture
. The daily interaction between the
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locals
and
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travellers
will
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to appreciate and cherish their
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seemingly
ordinary way of doing things. One fails to perceive the beauty if he or she
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highlights the
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custom.
Besides
,
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contributes to
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revenue. Money
is required
to maintain buildings of historical and cultural value. Traditional industries can
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by
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income.

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can do much to promote
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tradition
and
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culture
.
Indeed
, what captivates
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is not
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the
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scenery
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traditions
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the collateral damage down to a minimum.
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IELTS essay Some people think that traditional culture is being damaged as it is used as a tool to make money in the tourism industry. Others think it is the only way to preserve and protect culture and tradition. Discuss and state your opinion.

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