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Some people think that there should be change while others not.write its advantage and disadvantage.

Some people think that there should be change while others not. write its advantage and disadvantage. yXxLD
Now a days, adults of some nation are preferring to travel or work for a while between completing their high school and commencing graduate studies. How ever, in my opinion it will not be a good option to take a gap in studies after they finish their schooling. The greatest benefit of working or traveling is that they will be able to gain practical knowledge of market and experience from a firm where they will be doing a job, consequently this will help them in getting a good job easily after they will finish their university studies, for example -after graduate studies interviewer generally asks question based in practice knowledge and experience, so Aleta the person with some experience will be ahead of many other students. Moreover, traveling will allow then a chance to refresh and explore the world, so that they will be of energy when university studies will begin. On the other hand taking a year gap can create some problems too, there is a possibility they young students may get attracted towards wrong activities such as consuming drugs and drinking alcohol during their free time. Furthermore he/she will be wasting one precious year of life. Along with these problems there is a chance that university may change the rules of admission or may be the cutoff score of upcoming year will be higher, in which he/she will not be eligible for admission. To conclude, although taking a year gap after high school has some positives, but in my opinion risks are more that young students may indulge in criminal activities which will ruin their life, hence students should continue their education without any break.
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Now a days
, adults of
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some
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nation
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are preferring
to travel or work for a while between completing their high school and commencing graduate
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studies
.
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How ever
, in my opinion it will not be a
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good
option to take a gap in
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studies
after they finish their schooling.

The greatest benefit of working or traveling is that they will be able to gain practical knowledge of market and experience from a firm where they will be doing a job,
consequently
this will
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help
them in getting a
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good
job
easily
after they will finish their university
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studies
,
for example
-after graduate
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studies
interviewer
generally
asks question based in practice knowledge and experience,
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so
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Aleta
the person with
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experience will be ahead of
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many
other
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students
.
Moreover
, traveling will
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allow
then a chance to refresh and explore the world,
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so
that they will be of energy when university
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studies
will
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begin
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On the other hand
taking a
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year
gap can create
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some
problems too, there is a possibility they young
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students
may
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get
attracted towards
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wrong
activities such as consuming drugs and drinking alcohol during their free time.
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Furthermore
he/she will be wasting one precious
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year
of life. Along with these problems there is a chance that university may
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change
the
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rules
of admission or may be the cutoff score of upcoming
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year
will be higher, in which he/she will not be eligible for admission.

To conclude
, although taking a
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year
gap after high school has
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some
positives,
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but
in my opinion
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risks
are more that young
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students
may indulge in criminal activities which will ruin their life,
hence
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students
should continue their education without any break.
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IELTS essay Some people think that there should be change while others not. write its advantage and disadvantage.

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