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Choose living in a vertical city or horizon city :

Choose living in a vertical city or horizon city: Ajwrl

Some people believe that it is convenient to live in residential skyscappers while others think low-rise city is a better place to settle down. Both of place may have its own benefit. Personally I think high-rise building could bring more advantages in various aspects of life. Firstly, living in vertical city is convenient to inhabitant because it provides multiple services utility. Many restaurants, shopping malls, schools, . . are established into an area which help residential entertain without travelling far from home. For example, instead of waking up early, parents can have their own time since they easily take their children to school located nearly the building. Secondly, a city with skyscrapers can have more space and land for pubic useage. It is characterised by high rise buildings can accommodate large population on a small part of land. Therefore government would be able to use this land to construct road, park, supermarket, … to enhace inhabitant’s life. People have more places to find new friends as well as do exercise. For instance, the road could be widened to avoid traffic jams, reduce air pollution. Lastly, safety in the apartment building is strictly guaranteed. Thanks to dozen of officers and security guards who hired to watch building carefully all day, dweller can advoid unwanted situation such as thieves. A lots cameras were installed in the skyscraper to rigorous control people in and out. For example, nowadays, almost vertical city use elevator card which just allow inhabitant or officers move by lift. In conclusion, horizon city may bring a lot of advantages but I reckon vertical city is more suitable for me.

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live
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own
 benefit. Personally
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think
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 could bring more advantages in various aspects of life.

Firstly
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schools
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help
 residential entertain without travelling far from home. For example
, instead
 of waking up early, parents can have their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 time since they easily
 take their children to school located nearly
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Secondly
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pubic
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characterised
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buildings
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small
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government
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use
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enhace
 inhabitant’s life. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
People
 have more places to find new friends as well
 as do exercise. For instance
, the road could be widened
 to avoid traffic jams, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alleviate
reduce
 air pollution.

Lastly
, safety in the apartment You use this word too often, consider replacing it withhuthouseconstructionarchitecturehome
building
 is strictly
 guaranteed. Thanks to Use "a dozen" or use a number before 'dozen'.a dozen
dozen
 of officers and security guards who hired to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitor
watch
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building
carefully
 all day, dweller can Possible spelling mistake found.avoidad void
advoid
 unwanted situation such as thieves. If you mean a great quantity, use "A lots of cameras"?A lots of cameras
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were installed
 in the skyscraper to rigorous control This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 in and out. For example
, nowadays, almost vertical city This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 elevator card which This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
allow
 inhabitant or officers This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocate
move
 by lift.

In conclusion
, horizon city may bring This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
a lot of
 advantages This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 I reckon vertical city is more suitable for me. 