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Some people think that the news media nowadays have influenced people’s lives in negative ways. Others disagree and say that they have been more positive. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that the news media nowadays have influenced people’s lives in negative ways. Others disagree and say that they have been more positive. KAPN
It is an undeniable truth that media is the most widely used around the whole country. Although many people believe that the news-press have influenced a person's daily routine one a pessimistic way, I differ from this to a large extent. My position is argued further with explanations. On the one hand, there are numerous advantageous ways for people's lives. The foremost one is knowing about the economy around the world. To be more specific, if media reporters are not showing the economy rate of any country, no one would prepare for increasing their economic growth for developing their region. For example, one survey was conducted in the US, they declared that 5 per cent of the economy well-fare growth done by just watching TV news. Moreover, they also give information about the prediction of weather conditions. So, we can take precautions about incoming dangerous things such as tsunamis, typhoon, heavy-rainfall, so on. However, I would not overlook the other side too. To begin with, there are some disadvantages that come from news media. Firstly, they are influenced by unnecessary things that have been presented by the media aids. Advertisement from the media has a great focus on the things that are unnecessary for people. To cite an example, children are willing to pay more money on fake beautiful things which they don't need. Also, rumours from the news are becoming threats to the public who are watching the news. To add to this, they could become panic and feel stressed. Consequently, this can occur in serious health issues. This, to conclude this discussion, it can be finally said that despite the issues of media, I believe that media is the only way to grow the success rate of the economy and to know more about weather conditions.
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is the most
widely
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used
around the whole country. Although
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many
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people
believe that the news-press have influenced a person's daily routine one a pessimistic way, I differ from this to a large extent. My position
is argued
further
with explanations. On the one hand, there are numerous advantageous ways for
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people
's
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lives
. The foremost one
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is knowing
about the
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economy
around the world. To be more specific, if
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media
reporters are not showing the
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economy
rate of any country, no one would prepare for increasing their economic growth for developing their region.
For example
, one survey
was conducted
in the US, they declared that 5 per cent of the
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economy
well-fare growth done by
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just
watching TV
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news
.
Moreover
, they
also
give information about the prediction of weather conditions.
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So
, we can take precautions about incoming
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dangerous
things such as tsunamis, typhoon, heavy-rainfall,
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so
on.
However
, I would not overlook the other side too. To
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begin
with, there are
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some
disadvantages that
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come
from
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news
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media
.
Firstly
, they
are influenced
by unnecessary things that have
been presented
by the
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media
aids. Advertisement from the
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media
has a great focus on the things that are unnecessary for
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people
. To cite an example, children are willing to pay more money on fake
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beautiful
things which they don't need.
Also
,
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rumours
from the
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news
are becoming threats to the public who are watching the
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news
. To
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add
to this, they could become panic and feel
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stressed
.
Consequently
, this can occur in serious health issues. This,
to conclude
this discussion, it can be
finally
said that despite the issues of
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media
, I believe that
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media
is the
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only
way to grow the success rate of the
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economy
and to know more about weather conditions.

IELTS essay Some people think that the news media nowadays have influenced people’s lives in negative ways. Others disagree and say that they have been more positive.

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298 words
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