Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. KwnxR
The rise of the internet has connected societies in ways never experienced before. While some believe that the internet has driven people closer together, others argue that society has become more isolated due to it. Internet connectivity merits recognition that it has brought society closer since it allows humans to interact with more people. In the positive side of the matter, internet platforms get people closer because we interact with more friends everywhere in the world. In fact, individuals are closer because physical distance became irrelevant through the web. Regardless of the distance, friends may be constantly updated by sharing real-time videos, locations, and pictures thanks to social media or emails. Also, the web has turned into a vibrant place because people are sharing in social media more content with friends worldwide, therefore, in the web you find endless posts of your interest promoted by people you care. However, the internet also could set people apart since relationships are shallow and troublesome for some. For instance, people that engage in face-to-face conversations are closer and enjoy lasting friendships, contrary to social media acquaintances. Even with hundred friends on Facebook, users are often reluctant to share meaningful conversations, which may be a reason why many users stop following “friends” when differences arise. Also, the internet has brought bullying to their platforms causing some to isolate from the world. Users usually face zero consequences of their actions in the web, making it an unsafe place for victims of bullying, who often turn into isolation to cope with the unrestricted hate expressed by others cyber-users. In my opinion, the internet has brought us closer to more individuals around the world and has kept strong bonds with distant friends. The advantages of internet connectivity overweigh the disadvantages by far. People’s interaction is stronger than ever before thanks to internet connectivity and social communication. It is to expect some changes in policies that counteract the internet’s flaws but, in the meantime, people will be making more friends and strengthening current friendships with aid of the web.
The rise of the internet has connected societies in ways never experienced
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
. While
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
believe that the internet has driven
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
closer
together, others argue that society has become more isolated due to it. Internet connectivity merits recognition that it has brought society
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
closer
since it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
humans to interact with more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.

In the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
side of the matter, internet platforms
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
closer
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
we interact with more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
everywhere in the world. In fact, individuals are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
closer
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
physical distance became irrelevant through the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
web
. Regardless of the distance,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
may be
constantly
updated by sharing real-time videos, locations, and pictures thanks to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
media or emails.
Also
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
web
has turned into a vibrant place
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are sharing in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
media more content with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
worldwide,
therefore
, in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
web
you find endless posts of your interest promoted by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
you care.

However
, the internet
also
could set
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
apart since relationships are shallow and troublesome for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
.
For instance
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
that engage in face-to-face conversations are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
closer
and enjoy lasting friendships, contrary to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
media acquaintances. Even with
Use "a hundred" or use a number before 'hundred'.
hundred
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
on Facebook, users are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
reluctant to share meaningful conversations, which may be a reason why
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
users
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
following
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
“friends”
when differences arise.
Also
, the internet has brought bullying to their platforms causing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
to isolate from the world. Users
usually
face zero consequences of their actions in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
web
, making it an unsafe place for victims of bullying, who
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
turn into isolation to cope with the unrestricted hate expressed by others cyber-users.

In my opinion, the internet has brought us
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
closer
to more individuals around the world and has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
strong bonds with distant
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
. The advantages of internet connectivity
Possible spelling mistake found.
overweigh
the disadvantages by far.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People’s
interaction is stronger than ever
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
thanks to internet connectivity and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
communication. It is to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
in policies that counteract the internet’s flaws
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
, in the meantime,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
will be making more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
and strengthening
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
friendships with aid of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
web
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts