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Some people think that the development of technology may effect on environment problem

Some people think that the development of technology may effect on environment problem 2PagA
It is thought that the improvement of technology lead to appear various environmental problems. some individuals believe that communities need to live simple lives to solve environmental problems. while, others, view technology is contribute to tackle these problems. I advocate that the the technology play an important role to decrease the critical issue. In this essay it will be discuss both view points and support some real examples. On the one hand, The majority of masses around the world are consider that the existence of technology affect on the environment and have brought a lot of environmental issues, however, the mankind must be live in simple way. Th main reason for believing that is the overuse of technology may increase the demand for factories constructions. it may lead to spread out of environmental issues like pollution which comes from the industrials buildings. Moreover the societies tend to utilize the technology in their daily life, consequently affects on waste disposal. The nation just care to play with technology as spend long time on their phones, so that lead to store a lot of house wastes. For instance, the recent studies which held in the bigest communities, prove that the pummlet of pollution due to the use of technology. On the other hand, some nations are consider the technology specially the social media could to decrease spread of environmental issues. the critical reason behind that is the social media contribute to aware people to avoid the pollution. societies through the platform social media could to discover the issues of environment and get the appropriate solutions. Futhermore some emergent problem became decrease because the public benefit from technology by provide some system to minimize this phenomenon. They supplied some alternative resources which may prevent the issue from grow. Agood illustration here, is that the last research which has conducted in progress countries obvious that the regulations that provide in the environment to limit the issue. In conclusion, while most of beilvers view that the aspect of applied science may lead to grow the environment issues, others are regard the revolution of technology may play crucial role to minimize the damage of invironment.
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that the improvement of
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lead
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environmental
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problems
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some
individuals believe that communities need to
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simple
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environmental
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while
, others, view
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technology
is
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contribute
to tackle these
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problems
. I advocate that
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the the
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technology
play an
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important
role to decrease the critical
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issue
. In this essay it will be
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both view points and support
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some
real examples.

On the one hand, The majority of masses around the world are consider that the existence of
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technology
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affect
on the
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environment
and have brought
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a lot of
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environmental
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issues
,
however
, the mankind
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must
be
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live
in simple way.
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main reason for believing
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the overuse of
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technology
may increase the demand for factories constructions.
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it
may
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lead
to spread out of
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environmental
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issues
like pollution which
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comes
from the industrials buildings.
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Moreover
the societies tend to utilize the
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technology
in their daily life,
consequently
affects on waste disposal.

The nation
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care to play with
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technology
as spend long time on their phones,
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lead
to store
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house
wastes.
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, the recent studies which held in the
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communities, prove that the
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of pollution due to the
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use
of technology.

On the other hand
,
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some
nations are
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consider
the
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specially
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environmental
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issues
.
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the
critical reason behind
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people
to avoid the pollution.
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societies
through the platform social media could to discover the
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issues
of
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environment
and
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get
the appropriate solutions.
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Futhermore
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emergent
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became decrease
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the public benefit from
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technology
by provide
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system to minimize this phenomenon. They supplied
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some
alternative resources which may
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prevent
the
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issue
from grow.
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illustration here, is that the last research which has conducted in progress countries obvious that the regulations that provide in the
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environment
to limit the issue.

In conclusion
, while most of
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beilvers
view that the aspect of applied science may
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lead
to grow the
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environment
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issues
, others are regard the revolution of
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technology
may play crucial role to minimize the
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damage of
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invironment
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IELTS essay Some people think that the development of technology may effect on environment problem

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359 words
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