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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe that there are better alternative ways of reducing crime.discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe that there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. rpr6
Although it is sometimes thought that the rate of crime should be reduced by imprisoning criminals for a long duration, other people believe that the focus should be on beneficial ways to solve it. In my opinion, I consider that other effective ways such as therapist offenders and giving them resources to learn new skills are far more beneficial than confining them to a prison cell. One the one hand, some people think that other different structure has significant effects on committing less infraction and I agree. Firstly, it is believed that criminal behaviour is a mindset that could be changed with getting help by a therapist which, consequently, their overview to the life will be changed in the long run. For example, children who live in deprived area do not have any idea about the other lifestyles except poverty, moreover, they are more likely to turn to the violation. Some research findings confirm that changing their mindset could contribute them to revolutionize their lifestyle that would have a beneficial effect on reducing the rate case. Secondly, offenders should be trainee to learn new skills and get official certificates. Since having an official certificate has a vital role to be hired, they will have greater job opportunities which, consequently, reducing the misdeed rate. On the other hand, it is often believed that criminals locked away and society effectively protects. First of all, It is maintained that it keeps criminals off the streets and prevents them re-offending so often. In this way, criminals cannot persuade others to commit a crime; therefore, The number of people who turning to breach is reduced. Secondly, this phenomenon can generate fear in a criminal’s mind. In other words, if a person is already aware of the intensity of punishment before committing any offence, it will discourage him from becoming a criminal. For example, in the UAE, the rapist and the murderer usually get lifetime prison sentences, resulting in making individuals think twice before committing any serious felony. Hence, imposing strict punishment deters people from committing crime. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion, I think that criminals stand a better chance to benefit from a better life if they change their mindset and learn new skills to change their lifestyle.
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that the rate of crime should be
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reduced
by imprisoning
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criminals
for a long duration,
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other
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people
believe that the focus should be on beneficial ways to solve it. In my opinion, I consider that
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other
effective ways such as therapist offenders and giving them resources to learn new
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skills
are far more beneficial than confining them to a prison cell.

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the one hand,
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some
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people
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think
that
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other
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different
structure has significant effects on
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committing
less infraction and I
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agree
.
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, it
is believed
that
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criminal
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behaviour
is a mindset that could be
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changed
with getting
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help
by a therapist which,
consequently
, their overview to the life will be
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changed
in the long run.
For example
, children who
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live
in deprived area do not have any
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idea
about the
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other
lifestyles except poverty,
moreover
, they are more likely to turn to the violation.
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Some
research findings confirm that changing their mindset could contribute them to revolutionize their lifestyle that would have a beneficial effect on reducing the rate case.
Secondly
, offenders should be trainee to learn new
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skills
and
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get
official certificates. Since having an official certificate has a vital role to
be hired
, they will have greater job opportunities which,
consequently
, reducing the misdeed rate.

On the
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other
hand, it is
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often
believed that
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criminals
locked away and society
effectively
protects.
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is maintained
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keeps
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criminals
off the streets and
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prevents
them re-offending
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so
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often
. In this way,
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criminals
cannot persuade others to commit a crime;
therefore
, The number of
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people
who turning to breach is
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reduced
.
Secondly
, this phenomenon can generate fear in a
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criminal’s
mind. In
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other
words, if a person is already aware of the intensity of punishment
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before
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committing
any
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offence
, it will discourage him from becoming a
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criminal
.
For example
, in the UAE, the rapist and the murderer
usually
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get
lifetime prison sentences, resulting in making individuals
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think
twice
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before
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committing
any serious felony.
Hence
, imposing strict punishment deters
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people
from
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committing
crime.

In conclusion
, while
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people
may vary in their opinion, I
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think
that
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criminals
stand a better chance to benefit from a better life if they
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change
their mindset and learn new
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skills
to
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change
their lifestyle.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe that there are better alternative ways of reducing crime.

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