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Some people think that space exploration is a waste of not only time but also the budget of the government that is why it should be stopped as soon as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that space exploration is a waste of not only time but also the budget of the government that is why it should be stopped as soon as possible. lD39
Nowadays, some may hold the opinion that the administration is squandering the exchequer to exploration in other spheres so that it would be relinquished. I partially disagree that because this research would lead to vital discoveries, the solution to current issues but we will not overlook, it pulls back some areas. Firstly, a myriad of wealth is allocated to space exploration because it would lead us to significant and scientific discoveries. In other words, it is a valuable key for our bright upcoming life to succeed and could be an assurance of not stumbling. This means that research allows us to know new information about galaxy, universal, alien life forms so that it is one of the few human endeavours that cross borders. For instance, when we began to launch satellites into space, it allowed us to find new raw material deposits on our planet that we could access to make life easier here. Thus, this affords a reduction in human needs, the elimination of deficiencies, and development. Secondly, discover the mysteries of the universe would be caused to solve current issues. To be more precise, the quest for a new homeland solves issues such as air pollution, drought, depletion of natural resources, etc. This is mainly because, an alternative way to overcome and eliminate the problem which we encounter every day. For example, this consequence would be a possibility for mankind's conflict to overpopulate. Therefore, extraterrestrial life looks as if essential. However, pour money into space research pulls back some fields like medicine. Meaning that basic health care is also one of the most important issues. Since it is shown that increasing the budget for this field develops medicine next level. To illustrate, numerous countries still lack basic medical infrastructure. Thereby, governments should prioritize medical research making health care accessible. To conclude, research would lead to vital discoveries, solution current issues as well as pulls back some areas.
Nowadays,
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may hold the opinion that the administration is squandering the exchequer to exploration in other spheres
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so
that it would
be relinquished
. I
partially
disagree that
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because
this
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research
would lead to vital discoveries, the solution to
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current
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issues
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we will not overlook, it pulls back
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some
areas.

Firstly
, a myriad of wealth
is allocated
to space exploration
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because
it would lead us to significant and scientific discoveries.
In other words
, it is a valuable key for our bright upcoming
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life
to succeed and could be an assurance of not stumbling. This means that
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research
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allows
us to know new information about galaxy, universal, alien
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life
forms
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so
that it is one of the few human
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endeavours
that cross borders.
For instance
, when we began to launch satellites into space, it
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allowed
us to find new raw material deposits on our planet that we could access to
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make
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life
easier here.
Thus
, this affords a reduction in human needs, the elimination of deficiencies, and development.

Secondly
, discover the mysteries of the universe would
be caused
to solve
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current
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issues
. To be more precise, the quest for a new homeland solves
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issues
such as air pollution, drought, depletion of natural resources, etc. This is
mainly
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because
, an alternative way to overcome and eliminate the problem which we encounter every day.
For example
, this consequence would be a possibility for mankind's conflict to overpopulate.
Therefore
, extraterrestrial
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life
looks as if essential.

However
, pour money into space
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research
pulls back
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some
fields like medicine. Meaning that basic health care is
also
one of the most
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important
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issues
. Since it
is shown
that increasing the budget for this field develops medicine
next
level. To illustrate, numerous countries
still
lack basic medical infrastructure. Thereby,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
should prioritize medical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
research
making health care accessible.

To conclude
,
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research
would lead to vital discoveries, solution
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issues
as well
as pulls back
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some
areas.
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IELTS essay Some people think that space exploration is a waste of not only time but also the budget of the government that is why it should be stopped as soon as possible.

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