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some people think that schools have to be more entertaining , while others think that their sole purpose is to educate.

some people think that schools have to be more entertaining, while others think that their sole purpose is to educate. gKL1
Undoubtly, schools are for educating people, however, some people think that schools have to be more entertaining. I agree that schools have to be more entertaining along with studies, otherwise students get bored of same routine of studies. Entertaining schools have extra cirricular activites like dance, music, swimming etc. It can offer opportunites to the learner to show inner hidden skills. For example, a 10 years old boy's hillarious dance gone viral on social media. Therefore he showed his talent besides his education. All age group loves entertainment in their life, so its good idea to keep entertainment along with studies to attract students to attain school daily, also students show interest to come to school. Schools with entertainmental studies not only attracts students but also to the parents to admit their children to get competitive and educated. Such school with purpose of entertainment along with studies can gain lot of money, name and fame. Therefore, I think schools have to be more entertaining along with routine studies to make studies fun and interesting.
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studies
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students
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same routine of studies.

Entertaining
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schools
have extra
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cirricular
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activites
like dance, music, swimming etc. It can offer
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opportunites
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All age group
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loves
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entertainmental
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to the parents to admit their children to
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get
competitive and educated. Such
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school
with purpose of entertainment
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along
with
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studies
can gain
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lot of
money, name and fame.

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, I
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think
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schools
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have to
be more entertaining
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along
with routine
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studies
to
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make
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studies
fun and interesting.
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IELTS essay some people think that schools have to be more entertaining, while others think that their sole purpose is to educate.

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  American English
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174 words
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