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Some people think that personal happiness is directly related to economic sucess.others argue that happiness depends on both Niews suces. Othens argue theat different factors Discus own opinion and give your opinion.

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Happiness
is the State of mind.
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Some
individuals assert that economic gain is the chief
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reason
for being
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happy
. According to them, if has
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enough
Wealth they Can
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Person
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live
a luxurious life fulfill their dreams and responsibility to words, their
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family
member. Addition to that, hobbies.
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be
pursued by this
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money
for can instance, with the
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of
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money
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people
not
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spend
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on what they require
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also
follow their passion,
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, economic Progress is paramount in
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persons
life to being happy.

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also
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other
factors like health, social relationship,
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Positive
thinking and
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self-compalance
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with, healthy lifestyle comparative
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qualm is the
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when
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are lack of it.
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, being with
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family
at the
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end
of the day, on festival day or holiday the
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way to
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love
towards them and when
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this happen
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play a pivotal role in individuals life.
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has wealth
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NO. blouse of all this
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this group
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biso
necessary for stay happy.

To conclude
, I
firmly
believe that
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cannot be
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,
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have
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opinion. Though
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to
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for others
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is
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bonding, optimistic and health is pain
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IELTS essay Some people think that personal happiness is directly related to economic sucess. others argue that happiness depends on both Niews suces. Othens argue theat different factors Discus own opinion and give your opinion.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
304 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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