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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. r8e56
people in our world have different opinions about job. some peopel believe that person always should enjoy doing work, however some people suppose that security is the main part in work. what is more others think that people can not always have satisfaction from job. i have mixed views about this issue and i tend to think that if workers love their jod and enjoy doing it that it is wonderful, because when we enjoy doing we relax and it is more heathy for our health. for illustrate my point i love drowing and sometimes people order me to paint some picture. i really keen on it and i do not tried when i draw. this happens because i believe that it is enjoyable for me. furthermore from my perspective safety as well as satisfaction is important. i i can only guess that if persons work risky that safety is mainly part. it means person should be carefull and safe. i believe that it is the more inmportant than satisfaction, beacause nowadays persons life mainly thing. people can live only once and thay may life great and beautiful, so they can live more and happy. my father is engeener and he loves his work, however it is dagurous job. moreover in my veiw people can not all time enjoy doing something. the main reason why this happens is people somtimes tired and want to sleep or simetimes they are sad and do not want to do anything. for exaple i usually tried and have depresion that i do not love anything. in conclusion i probebly prefer everthing which people think important, beause people have to enjoy dong their work nd job must to be safety.
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different
opinions about job.
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some
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peopel
believe that
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person
always should
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enjoy
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doing
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work
,
however
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some
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people
suppose that security is the main part in
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work
.
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what
is more others
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think
that
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people
can not always have satisfaction from job.

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i
have mixed views about this issue and
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i
tend to
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think
that if workers
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love
their
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jod
and
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enjoy
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doing
it that it is wonderful,
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because
when we
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enjoy
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doing
we relax and it is more
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heathy
for our health.
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for
illustrate my point
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i
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love drowing
and
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sometimes
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people
order me to paint
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some
picture.
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i
really
keen on it and
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i
do not
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tried
when
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i
draw.
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this
happens
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because
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i
believe that it is enjoyable for me.

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furthermore
from my perspective safety
as well
as satisfaction is
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important
.
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i
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i
can
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only
guess that if
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persons
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work
risky that safety is
mainly
part.
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it
means
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person
should be
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carefull
and safe.
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i
believe that it is the more
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inmportant
than satisfaction,
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beacause
nowadays
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persons
life
mainly
thing.
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people
can
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live
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only
once and
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thay
may life great and
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beautiful
,
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so
they can
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live
more and happy.
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my
father is
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engeener and
he
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loves
his
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work
,
however
it is
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dagurous
job.

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moreover
in my
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veiw
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people
can not all time
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enjoy
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doing
something.
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the
main reason why this happens is
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people
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somtimes
tired and want to sleep or
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simetimes
they are sad and do not want to do anything.
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for
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exaple
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i
usually
tried and have
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depresion
that
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i
do not
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love
anything.

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in
conclusion i
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probebly
prefer
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everthing
which
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people
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think
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important
,
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beause
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people
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have to
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enjoy
dong their
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work
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nd
job
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must to
be safety.
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IELTS essay Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important.

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