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Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but other people think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen at TV and the internet. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

Travelling is a movement of visit one place to another. It can be done by foot, bus, train, ship, boat, car, aeroplane, car, etc, . Moreover, there are so many places like customs, historical, vegetational, religious etc, . Firstly, today era, people like to travel different places, rather in the city, state or out of countryside. People fall to collect information about differential qualities of places. Every place have their own identities, for examples mussoorie it’s official called queen of mountains, Switzerland, etc, . They captures every moments and every famous things of that place. Secondly, some person things that it’s not necessarily to travel for gaining knowledge of the places. Whereas, it’s digital world we can get all the information through internet at sitting home. It’s time saving and we get every small thing can knows by google. We can make comparison of its each other. Overall, My opinion is all the ages likes to travel, even the oldest age persons. As compare by getting online see and visiting, are two difference talk. Some people fallen in vegetation for fresh air, relaxing for stress- buster, etc, . Online don’t same as travelling. Conclusion, there are number of population and everyone have their mindset, own choice. Both of view are people’s have their choices. Travelling is specific for our lifestyle.
Travelling is a movement of visit one
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place
to another. It can
be done
by foot, bus, train, ship, boat, car,
‘aeroplane’ is a common British expression. Consider using expressions more common to American English.
aeroplane
, car, etc
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, .
Moreover
, there are
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so
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many
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places
like customs, historical,
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vegetational
, religious etc
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, .


Firstly
,
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today
era,
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people
like to travel
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different
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places
,
rather
in the city, state or out of countryside.
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People
fall to collect information about differential qualities of
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places
. Every
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place
have their
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own
identities, for examples
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mussoorie
it’s official called queen of mountains, Switzerland, etc
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, .
They
The pronoun ‘They’ must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: “capture”
captures
every
The noun should probably be in the singular form: “moment”?
moments
and every
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famous
things of that place.

Secondly
,
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some
person things that it’s not
necessarily
to travel for gaining knowledge of the
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places
.
“Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whereas
, it’s digital world we can
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get
all the information through internet at sitting home. It’s time
Use a comma before ‘and’ if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
saving and
we
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get
every
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small
thing can
The modal verb ‘can’ requires the verb’s base form.
knows
by google. We can
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make
comparison of its each other.

Overall
, My opinion is all the ages likes to travel, even the oldest age persons. As compare by getting online
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see
and visiting, are two difference talk.
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Some
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people
fallen in vegetation for fresh air, relaxing for
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stress
- buster, etc
Did you just mean “,” or “.”?
, .
Online don’t same as travelling.

Conclusion, there are number of population and everyone
The pronoun ‘everyone’ is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: “has”, “had”.
have
their mindset,
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own
choice. Both of view are
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people’s
have their choices. Travelling is specific for our lifestyle.
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but other people think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen at TV and the internet.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
220 words
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