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Some people think that it is better for companies to make long-lasting products. Others think that the most important thing is the cheaper prices. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

Some people think that it is better for companies to make long-lasting products. Others think that the most important thing is the cheaper prices. 8VVG
It has been debated that some of the individuals consider that making durable consumer goods is more profitable for companies while low priced products are the most essential for others. There are some opinions on both sides of this topic and I will deliberate them now. On the one hand, I understand why certain people are in favor of the opinion that firms should be prepared long-lasting products. The overwhelming majority of people are in agreement that buying durable products is more suitable and productive than others. For example, there are some electronical or other types of durable goods that lots of editors say that you can utilize these gadgets till you lose them. Nonetheless, some of the consumers prefer cheaper goods. Whereas this is efficient for the economy, it has several drawbacks for the environment. In addition, fortunately, these days thanks to low priced consumer goods a lot of people, regardless of their financial status can get modern technological developments and other innovative and necessary products. In conclusion, taking the above-mentioned points into account, I agree with the first statement more than the second, due to its several negative aspects.
It has
been debated
that
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some of the
individuals consider that making durable consumer
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goods
is more profitable for
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companies
while low priced products are the most essential for others. There are
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some
opinions on both sides of this topic and I will deliberate them
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now
.

On the one hand, I understand why certain
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people
are in favor of the opinion that firms should
be prepared
long-lasting products. The overwhelming majority of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are in agreement that buying durable products is more suitable and productive than others.
For example
, there are
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some
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electronical
or
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other
types of durable
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goods
that lots of editors say that you can utilize these gadgets till you lose them.

Nonetheless,
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some of the
consumers prefer cheaper
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goods
. Whereas this is efficient for the economy, it has several drawbacks for the environment.
In addition
,
fortunately
, these days thanks to low priced consumer
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goods
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a lot of
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people
, regardless of their financial status can
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get
modern technological developments and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
innovative and necessary products.

In conclusion
, taking the above-mentioned points into account, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the
first
statement more than the second, due to its several
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negative
aspects.

IELTS essay Some people think that it is better for companies to make long-lasting products. Others think that the most important thing is the cheaper prices.

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191 words
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