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Most high level positions in companies are filled by men, even though the workforce in many developed countries consists of 50 percent female workers. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of management positions to women. Discuss, what is your opinion?

Most high level positions in companies are filled by men, even though the workforce in many developed countries consists of 50 percent female workers. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of management positions to women. Discuss, what is your opinion? 7MM2
A number of movements, world has seen for the equal rights for women like a man. Government has done necessary actions. Some of people criticises that, it’s a still reality that man is playing a key role on highest management position like manager or Nation leader as compared with woman. They argues that government strategies are not implemented in right way on ground level. SO they suggested to reserve the few management role seats for woman. I am strong ly criticise this opinion. Top management level positions are very crucial, these can’t be achieved by implementing the reservation policy? What happen if the seats will not be filled? What will happen if someone who joined this role by reservation and do not’s have required skill-sets? This may lead to serious consequences. Company can loss own performance. So there should not be injustice to those who really accurate and eligible for the post. Such senior management roles should be given to thos candidates only they are totally fit to purpose and having necessary skills. Not only skill is import also candidate should has willingness and positive attitude. And have ability to build the house from the scratch. People who are in favour of the reservation for females they claim that if woman will get the reservation so she will gain equally opportunities like man in organization which will helps to build the self-confidence and moral. This can spread the strong message in the society where woman is not getting equal rights like man Suppose if any woman who woks for the such roles it can be a inspiration for the others as well. This encourage positivity and willingness which both killed by outdated thinking of man in society. In conclusion, I am not against about the equally rights for woman, But to achieve it every one has ensure that there should not be any injustice with the others. Companies has to start various trainings programs in which need to make sure that woman should take part actively and enhance own skill that are prerequisite for the management roles. So by this we can show strong message in society.
A number of movements, world has
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seen
for the equal
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rights
for women like a
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man
.
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Government
has done necessary actions.
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Some
of
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people
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criticises
that, it’s a
still
reality that
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man
is playing a key
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role
on highest
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management
position like manager or Nation leader as compared with
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woman
. They
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argues
that
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government
strategies are not implemented in
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right
way on ground level.
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SO
they
The verb 'suggested' is used with the gerund form: "suggested reserving".
suggested to reserve
the few
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management
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role
seats for
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woman
. I am strong
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ly
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criticise
this opinion.

Top
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management
level positions are
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very
crucial,
Did you mean "this can" or "these cans"?
these can
’t
be achieved
by implementing the
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reservation
policy? What happen if the seats will not
be filled
? What will happen if someone
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who
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joined
this
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role
by
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reservation
and do not’s have required
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skill
-sets? This may lead to serious consequences.
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Company
can
"loss" is a noun. Did you mean the verb "lose" (= 'to lose')?
loss
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own
performance.
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So
there should not be injustice to those
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who
really
accurate and eligible for the post. Such senior
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management
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roles
should be
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given
to
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thos
candidates
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only
they are
totally
fit to purpose and having necessary
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skills
. Not
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only
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skill
is import
also
candidate should
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has
willingness and
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positive
attitude. And have ability to build the
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house
from the scratch.

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People
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who
are in
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favour
of the
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reservation
for females they claim that if
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woman
will
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get
the
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reservation
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so
she will gain
equally
opportunities like
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man
in organization which will
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helps
to build the self-confidence and moral. This can spread the strong message in the society where
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woman
is not getting equal
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rights
like
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man
Suppose if any
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woman
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who
woks for the such
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roles
it can be
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
inspiration for the others
as well
.
The verb 'encourage' is plural. Did you mean: "This encourages"? Did you use a verb instead of a noun?
This encourage
positivity and willingness which both killed by outdated thinking of
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man
in society.

In conclusion
, I am not against about the
equally
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rights
for
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woman
,
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But
to achieve it every one has
Use past participle here: "ensured".
ensure
that there should not be any injustice with the others.
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Companies
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has to
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start
various trainings programs in which need to
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make
sure that
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woman
should
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take part
actively
and enhance
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own
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skill
that are prerequisite for the
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management
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roles
.
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So
by this we can
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show
strong message in society.
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IELTS essay Most high level positions in companies are filled by men, even though the workforce in many developed countries consists of 50 percent female workers. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of management positions to women. Discuss, what is your opinion?

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