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Some people think that in a city ,the best way to travel is by car,while other people think that bicycles are better way of travelling in a city

Some people think that in a city, the best way to travel is by car, while other people think that bicycles are better way of travelling in a city 2b5WM
According to some masses, in the latest scenario most human being argue that the best way to travel by car is more convenient and easy. However, I personally agree that riding by bicycle is most significant because it won't affect the atmosphere. it has both positive and negative drawbacks which I will explain in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, in the universe most of individuals having a dream of luxuary collection of car. Moreover, people invest huge budget on buying these motor whereas, it is simple and convinent for scholars to do outdoor task and travel in vacation. similarly, car is very easy tool anyone can reach their journey within a certain time. likewise, people can do shopping and enjoy the greenery places with the wheels. in addition, if a more people use car there will be a noise pollution and effect atmosphere and climate and scholars will face different problem such as skin disease, breathing problem. for instance, if a human being use more car by making their standard easy on the one hand he/she gain weight and become unhealthy. Secondly, in my native country nepal people are so attentive about their life and pollution. 90% of individuals are using bicycle for making city clean and their life too. Besides, Nowadays pupils are also using modern means of bicycle for making the surrounding good. By cycling to reach a destination exercise is done without any effort. for example, people who went to work on bicycle were more physically fit rather than the person who use car. in additionally, people are slowly understand the benefits and many pupils have started to use them as well because it would not affect the environment like car do. To conclude, in my prospective I agree that the most suited transport for travelling is the cycle, because it is less in price and does not affect the atmosphere and it is eco friendly and good for health
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masses, in the latest scenario most human being argue that the best way to travel by
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car
is more convenient and easy.
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, I
personally
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agree
that riding by
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bicycle
is most significant
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because
it won't affect the atmosphere.
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has both
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positive
and
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drawbacks which I will
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explain
in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, in the universe
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most of individuals
having a dream of
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luxuary
collection of
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car
.
Moreover
,
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people
invest huge budget on buying these motor whereas, it is simple and
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convinent
for scholars to do outdoor task and travel in vacation.
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similarly
,
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car
is
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very
easy tool anyone can reach their journey within a certain time.
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likewise
,
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people
can
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do shopping
and enjoy the greenery places with the wheels.
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in
addition, if a more
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people
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use
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car
there will be a noise pollution and effect atmosphere and climate and scholars will face
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different
problem such as skin disease, breathing problem.
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for
instance, if a human being
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use
more
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car
by making their standard easy on the one hand he/she gain weight and become unhealthy.
Secondly
, in my native country
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nepal
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people
are
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so
attentive about their life and pollution. 90% of individuals are using
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bicycle
for making city clean and their life too.
Besides
, Nowadays pupils are
also
using modern means of
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bicycle
for making the surrounding
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good
. By cycling to reach a destination exercise
is done
without any effort.
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for
example,
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people
who went to work on
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bicycle
were more
physically
fit
rather
than the person who
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use
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car
.
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in
additionally
,
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people
are
slowly
understand the benefits and
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many
pupils have
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started
to
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use
them
as well
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because
it would not affect the environment like
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car
do.
To conclude
, in my prospective I
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agree
that the most suited transport for travelling is the cycle,
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because
it is less in price and does not affect the atmosphere and it is
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eco friendly
and
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good
for
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health
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IELTS essay Some people think that in a city, the best way to travel is by car, while other people think that bicycles are better way of travelling in a city

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
324 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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