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Some people think that good teamwork makes a company successful; others think that good leadership is the reason behind the success of a company. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Some people think that good teamwork makes a company successful; others think that good leadership is the reason behind the success of a company. Discuss both sides and give your opinion jab1
It is an undeniable fact that today people has a strong view that teamwork makes an organization successful. However, others believe that leadership is the prominent factor that leads a company towards success. An even the essay accord with the statement that teamwork is essential. On the one hand, people are inclined to believe that at the workplace teamwork is important for achieving goals. As well as it helps in creating good working environment within the company. For example if a short deadline has been given to complete the project by the management in that case the team who works collectively can perform better than the team which has lack of coordination. Others contradict with the fact and they are in support of the fact good leadership can be more helpful in the performance improvement of an organization. A leader always guides people of an organization. For instance, some Indian banks prefer to hire people of top management colleges, as it is believed that these people are capable to run the processes swiftly. The essay given prominence to the fact that teamwork plays a vital role for a company as in a teamwork environment distribution of work and responsibilities make teamwork more beneficial for the team. Conclusively, different stratums have various faiths Some are accord with the notion that teamwork is prominent for success of any organization whereas others believe that good leaders are essential for the growth for a company. Even the essay opines with the statement that teamwork is important due to many reasons.
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today
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has
a strong view that
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teamwork
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makes
an
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organization
successful.
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, others believe that leadership is the prominent factor that leads a
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company
towards success. An even the essay accord with the statement that
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teamwork
is essential.

On the one hand,
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people
are inclined
to believe that at the workplace
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teamwork
is
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important
for achieving goals.
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as it
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helps
in creating
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good
working environment within the
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company
.
For example
if a short deadline has been
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given
to complete the project by the management
in that case
the team who works
collectively
can perform better than the team which has lack of coordination.

Others contradict with the
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fact and
they are in support of the
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fact
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good
leadership can be more helpful in the performance improvement of an
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organization
. A leader always guides
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people
of an
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organization
.
For instance
,
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some
Indian banks prefer to hire
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people
of top management colleges, as it
is believed
that these
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people
are capable to run the processes
swiftly
.

The essay
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given
prominence to the
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fact
that
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teamwork
plays a vital role for a
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company
as in a
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teamwork
environment distribution of work and responsibilities
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make
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teamwork
more beneficial for the team.

Conclusively
,
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different
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have various faiths
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Some
are accord with the notion that
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teamwork
is prominent for success of any
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organization
whereas others believe that
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good
leaders are essential for the growth for a
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company
. Even the essay opines with the statement that
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teamwork
is
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important
due to
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many
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IELTS essay Some people think that good teamwork makes a company successful; others think that good leadership is the reason behind the success of a company. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
256 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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