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Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action.

Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action. WP1a
Environmental issues have sparked off an intense debate on whether individuals or the government can solve the grave problems. Many opine that these problems are enormous for individuals to tackle, yet others opine that governments cannot curb this environmental chaos without individuals’ effort. In the case, I put forward the notion that a holistic approach is needed so as to fight the environmental damages. Environmental issues cannot be solved by individuals alone because the overwhelming number of environmental hazards we face, including greenhouse effects, mass extinction of species, water pollution, soil erosion, global warming and others, are the consequences of the global revolution of industrialization and our greedy behaviours for a luxurious lifestyle. Therefore, handling environmental issues is far beyond the scope of individual effort. To curb it, we need strict laws in place and massive budgets which is out of the scope of individuals. On the contrary, the government alone cannot solve the planet’s biggest issue. In simple words, individuals should avoid cars whenever possible, use energy-efficient home appliances, reduce the use of plastics and plant trees. Only then the government’s will be able to harness the catastrophic effect of environmental damage. However, in my opinion, environmental problems have multifarious dimensions and can be addressed by adopting holistically all kinds of stakeholders such as governments, individuals, international communities, civil societies and activists. This is because the problem is actually a global phenomenon and without collaborative efforts, there is no effective solution to it. In conclusion, individuals or the government alone cannot combat the environmental crisis as it is an international issue. Therefore, mass people, governments and international organizations have their own role to play in order to grapple with the environmental issues.
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issues
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individuals
or the
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government
can solve the grave
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problems
.
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opine that these
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problems
are enormous for
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to tackle,
yet
others opine that
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governments
cannot curb this
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environmental
chaos without
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individuals’
effort. In the case, I put forward the notion that a holistic approach
is needed
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so as to
fight the
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environmental
damages.

Environmental
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issues
cannot
be solved
by
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individuals
alone
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because
the overwhelming number of
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environmental
hazards we face, including greenhouse effects, mass extinction of species, water pollution, soil erosion, global warming
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and others
, are the consequences of the global revolution of industrialization and our greedy
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behaviours
for a luxurious lifestyle.
Therefore
, handling
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environmental
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issues
is far beyond the scope of
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individual
effort. To curb it, we need strict laws in place and massive budgets which is out of the scope of individuals.

On the contrary
, the
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government
alone cannot solve the planet’s biggest
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issue
. In simple words,
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individuals
should avoid cars whenever possible,
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use
energy-efficient home appliances,
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reduce
the
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use
of plastics and plant trees.
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Only
then the
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government’s
will be able to harness the catastrophic effect of
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environmental
damage.

However
, in my opinion,
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environmental
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problems
have multifarious dimensions and can
be addressed
by adopting
holistically
all kinds of stakeholders such as
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governments
,
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individuals
, international communities, civil societies and activists. This is
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because
the
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problem
is actually a global phenomenon and without collaborative efforts, there is no effective solution to it.

In conclusion
,
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individuals
or the
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government
alone cannot combat the
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environmental
crisis as it is an international
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issue
.
Therefore
, mass
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people
,
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governments
and international organizations have their
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own
role to play in order to grapple with the
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environmental
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issues
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action.

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