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Some people think that drug addicts should be treated like criminals and sent to jail, while others believe that they should be treated like patients and sent hospital. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that drug addicts should be treated like criminals and sent to jail, while others believe that they should be treated like patients and sent hospital. 28bX
Some people argue that people who are addicted to drugs should go to jail because they have broken the law, while others say that they are sick and should be taken care of in hospital. While sentencing them to a term in prison is the quick and easy solution, I believe that it is better to be compassionate and help them get better in hospital. On the one hand, custodial sentences provides a short term solution to the drugs problem. To illustrate, by locking up addicts the government can take them off the street and they believe that this will stop them using narcotics and also causing any harms to others. For instance, in the USA, someone caught with even a small amount of heroin is likely to be locked up for at least a year. However, I think that this does not solve the actual problem because drug addicts can gain access to drugs while in prison and will be still hooked upon release. On the other hand, helping drug addicts kick their habit under medical supervision is thought to reduce the number of addicts in the long term. To elaborate, by treating addiction as a disease and the person with compassion, the root cause can be addressed and that person can eventually become free from drugs. For example, in Switzerland heroin addicts are given free heroin by doctors until they are ready to stop using the drug and this has resulted in drug related crimes falling by 80%. I believe this method is preferable because addiction is a disease and it benefits both the individual and society as a whole. In conclusion, although throwing addicts in jail might get them off the street for few years, it does not treat the actual problem and that is why it is more important to help them get off drugs in a medical facility. It is recommended that more governments follow this approach and bring in more thinking initiatives.
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should go to jail
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be taken
care of in hospital. While sentencing them to a term in prison is the quick and easy solution, I believe that it is better to be compassionate and
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help
them
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better in hospital. On the one hand, custodial sentences provides a short term solution to the
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problem. To illustrate, by locking up
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addicts
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government
can take them off the
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street and
they believe that this will
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stop
them using narcotics and
also
causing any harms to others.
For instance
, in the USA, someone caught with even a
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small
amount of heroin is likely to
be locked
up for at least a year.
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think
that this does not solve the actual problem
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because
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drug
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addicts
can gain access to
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drugs
while in prison and will be
still
hooked upon release.
On the other hand
, helping
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drug
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addicts
kick their habit under medical supervision is
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thought
to
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reduce
the number of
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addicts
in the long term. To elaborate, by treating addiction as a disease and the person with compassion, the root cause can
be addressed
and that person can
eventually
become free from
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drugs
.
For example
, in Switzerland heroin
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addicts
are
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given
free heroin by doctors until they are ready to
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stop
using the
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drug
and this has resulted in
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drug
related crimes falling by 80%. I believe this method is preferable
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because
addiction is a disease and it benefits both the individual and society as a whole.
In conclusion
, although throwing
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addicts
in jail might
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get
them off the street for few years, it does not treat the actual problem and
that is
why it is more
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important
to
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help
them
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get
off
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drugs
in a medical facility. It
is recommended
that more
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governments
follow this approach and bring in more thinking initiatives.
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IELTS essay Some people think that drug addicts should be treated like criminals and sent to jail, while others believe that they should be treated like patients and sent hospital.

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