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Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it a waste of time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In the creative world arts plays a vital role. Its frequently argued by some individuals that art and drawing must be fundamental subject for juveniles during school whereas others contradicts that these subjects are just waste of time. I believe art is an essential subject and must be into students syllabus. This essay will discuss about both the points. First, art is a subject which makes children's creative and they think out of there mind. Many pupil find art as a relaxing subject and they feel it enjoyable. Secondly as other subjects it don't contain any formulas or answers for which children's have to cramp it or put pressure to the brain. Thirdly through art child can express their feelings and emotions. For an instance a child made a picture of his family happily staying together in a little home. This implies that child very happy with his family. On the other hand, It take long time for an art period during the school time and there is less time for other important subjects like maths, science, general knowledge, social science, language subjects and so on. In order to be a engineer and doctor its crucial that these subjects are taught perfectly. However, not every student is good in art work so its not much beneficial for them to have art period. In conclusion, i believe that art should be taught during the school time but it shouldn't be compulsory for all students, it may be optional for the student's for those who are willing to do so.
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arts
plays a vital role. Its
frequently
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some
individuals that
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art
and drawing
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must
be fundamental
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subject
for juveniles during school whereas others contradicts that these
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subjects
are
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just
waste of
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time
. I believe
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art
is an essential
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subject
and
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must
be into students syllabus. This essay will
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discuss about both
the points.
First
,
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art
is a
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which
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makes
children's
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creative and
they
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think
out of there mind.
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Many
pupil find
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art
as a relaxing
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subject and
they feel it enjoyable.
Secondly
as
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other
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subjects
it
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don't
contain any formulas or answers for which children's
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have to
cramp it or put pressure to the brain.
Thirdly
through
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art
child can express their feelings and emotions. For an instance a child made a picture of his family
happily
staying together in a
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little
home.
This implies that
child
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very
happy with his family. On the
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other
hand, It
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take
long
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time
for an
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art
period during the school
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time
and there is less
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for
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other
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important
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subjects
like
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maths
, science, general knowledge, social science, language
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subjects
and
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on. In order to be
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a
engineer and doctor its crucial that these
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subjects
are taught
perfectly
.
However
, not every student is
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good
in
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art
work
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so
its not much beneficial for them to have
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art
period.
In conclusion
,
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i
believe that
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art
should
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during the school
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time
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but
it shouldn't be compulsory for all students, it may be optional for the student's for those who are willing to do
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IELTS essay Some people think that art is an essential subject for children at school while others think it a waste of time.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
258 words
5.5
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