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Some people think it’s not necessary to go to tourist places now that we can see these places on the Internet. Do you agree? Why or Why not?

Some people think it’s not necessary to go to tourist places now that we can see these places on the Internet. Do you agree? Why or Why not? 6LBmW
As a person who was born in a country with many famous landscapes, I think just sitting down and seeing these places on the Internet is not enough. I will interpret it for you in 3 parts. First of all I will mention that the Internet cannot describe how breathtaking these tourist places are. These days you can easily find any pictures or videos of a place where you want to see but actually, all these pictures are edited. So, you cannot see the real color of the sky, trees or any objects there. Then, all the pictures are 2D and it makes you not have the feeling when you see it in real life. Secondly, in all tourist places around the world, there are many activities that you must experience directly to see how exciting they are. Such as bungee jump, parachute jump, pilgrimage or making some souvenir by yourself for some special people. In my opinion, tourism is the time that you can spend with someone that you love, do what you are keen on and throw the stress away. So I think some outside activities are a good choice for you after a working-hard time. Finally, the most important thing is that looking at too much on screen is not good for your health. When you sit down in front of a screen for a long time, your back will hurt, your eyes will sting and you can more easily get some serious health problems than others like cancer, haemorrhoidal, refractions problems, ect. Time flies, life is short so why don’t we have some memorable day with our close relatives. Touring through a small screen is okay but it is not enough to give us any realistic experience. So just go and chill where you want to when you can.
As a person who
was born
in a country with
many
famous
landscapes, I
think
just
sitting down and seeing these
places
on the Internet is not
enough
. I will interpret it for you in 3 parts.

First of all
I will mention that the Internet cannot
describe
how breathtaking these tourist
places
are. These days you can
easily
find any pictures or videos of a
place
where you want to
see
but
actually, all these pictures
are edited
.
So
, you cannot
see
the real color of the sky, trees or any objects there. Then, all the pictures are 2D and it
makes
you not have the feeling when you
see
it in real life.

Secondly
, in all tourist
places
around the world, there are
many
activities that you
must
experience
directly
to
see
how exciting they are. Such as bungee jump, parachute jump, pilgrimage or making
some
souvenir by yourself for
some
special
people
. In my opinion, tourism is the time that you can spend with someone that you
love
, do what you are keen on and throw the
stress
away.
So
I
think
some
outside activities are a
good
choice for you after a working-
hard
time.

Finally
, the most
important
thing is that looking at too much on screen is not
good
for your health. When you sit down in front of a screen for a long time, your back will hurt, your eyes will sting and you can more
easily
get
some
serious health problems than others like cancer,
haemorrhoidal
,
refractions
problems,
ect
.

Time flies, life is short
so
why don’t we have
some
memorable day with our close relatives. Touring through a
small
screen is okay
but
it is not
enough
to give us any realistic experience.
So
just
go and chill where you want to when you can.
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IELTS essay Some people think it’s not necessary to go to tourist places now that we can see these places on the Internet. Do you agree? Why or Why not?

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  American English
5 paragraphs
303 words
5.5
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