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Some people think it is necessary to use animals for testing medicines intended for human use. Others, however, think it is cruel to do that. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is an undeniable truth that a plethora of experiments on animals are carried out by researchers and scientists for medical purposes. Certain individuals believe it is essential to use animals for experiment and research purposes for the sake of human survival. While others argue it is unethical. This essay discusses both the views and support the former view. Firstly, animal testing is extremely significant in scientific research as it is used for drug testing in order to create new medicines or vaccines. Secondly, by experimenting it is evident that we can advance in the field of medine and science. Thirdly, many important medicial discoveries were experimented on animals such as the Polio drops which is one of the crucial vaccines developed by scientists. Moreover, researches and imminent leaders trying to minimize and ban the suffering of there creatures in some cases. For instance, animal testins for cosmetics is banned is most of the countries and are fined upto 1 million dollars if they are caught. On the other hand, though people claim they the suffering is greatly diminished it does not justify the cause. Besides, there are alternative methods to conduct experiments without harming these voice less animals. For example, due to the new develpoment in bio-technology instead of inserting chemicals and other components directly on rabbits, we only need their DNA and human DNA on a database which the algorithm then predicts if it's safer for humans or not. Finally, humans have no moral right in killing animals eventhough there are lower than us in the foodchain. We must consider them and respect their lives. In conclusion, although there are many reasons why it is immoral to take the lives of said beings, I am of the view that on a regulated and controlled basis, scientists can conduct trials for medical reasons due to the fact that us, humans are the future of the world.
It is an undeniable truth that a plethora of experiments on
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animals
are carried
out by researchers and scientists for medical purposes. Certain individuals believe it is essential to
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use
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animals
for experiment and research purposes for the sake of
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human
survival.
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While
others argue it is unethical. This essay discusses both the views and support the former view.

Firstly
,
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animal
testing is
extremely
significant in scientific research as it is
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used
for drug testing in order to create new medicines or vaccines.
Secondly
, by experimenting it is evident that we can advance in the field of
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medine
and science.
Thirdly
,
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many
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important
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medicial
discoveries
were experimented
on
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animals
such as the Polio drops which is one of the crucial vaccines developed by scientists.
Moreover
, researches and imminent leaders trying to minimize and ban the suffering of
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there
creatures in
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some
cases.
For instance
,
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animal
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testins
for cosmetics
is banned
is most of the countries and
are fined
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upto
1 million dollars if they
are caught
.

On the other hand
, though
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people
claim they the suffering is
greatly
diminished it does not justify the cause.
Besides
, there are alternative methods to conduct experiments without harming these voice
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less
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animals
.
For example
, due to the new
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develpoment
in bio-technology
instead
of inserting chemicals and other components
directly
on rabbits, we
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only
need their DNA and
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human
DNA on a database which the algorithm then predicts if it's safer for
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humans
or not.
Finally
,
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humans
have no moral right in killing
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animals
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eventhough
there are lower than
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us
in the
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foodchain
. We
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must
consider them and respect their
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lives
.

In conclusion
, although there are
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many
reasons why it is immoral to take the
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lives
of said beings, I am of the view that on a regulated and controlled basis, scientists can conduct trials for medical reasons due to the fact that us,
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humans
are the future of the world.
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IELTS essay Some people think it is necessary to use animals for testing medicines intended for human use. Others, however, think it is cruel to do that.

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