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some people think it is better to rent an accommodation than own it. while others disagree saying that owning a property has many advantages. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the era of advancement, the accommodation has become a topic of discussion. The chunk of folks consider the rental property appropriate, but others think that it is better to own a house rather than living on rent. This essay will discuss how the rental property is the first consideration to save the money and how it is beneficial to own a farm in the terms of freedom of makeover including my opinion. To begin with, the rental land provides an opportunity to save money for future use, because most of the rental house includes the cost for heat and water. So, it will become cheaper to live. For example, if a student will take a room on the lease, then he/she has to pay extra money for hydro only and the rent for one-room will be within $350 to $500, however, with hydro the rent may vary from $400 to $550. But he has to pay the full amount for the mortgage every month excluding hydro and water bill if he will own any house. Overall, when a person can live with $550 only, then why he will pay extra, just because to become an owner of the home. On the other hand, freedom and privacy are the most important factors which are considered by everyone during own a house. For instance, when someone lives in a rental apartment, he/she can not do the things which they might wish to do in order to decorate their rooms like-wallpapers, hanging pictures on the walls and furniture because it might not be allowed by the actual owner or he will think that it is difficult for him to move with the furniture from one place to another. So, if he will buy his own home, then he can put the wallpaper and pictures on the walls as well as buy the new furniture to decorate the rooms. To conclude, this essay discussed why it is important to take rental plot or to own a property. In my opinion, I believe that it is good to live by paying the lease only not the mortgage until you actually need it.
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property appropriate,
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others
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rather
than living on rent. This essay will discuss how the
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property is the
first
consideration to save the money and how it is beneficial to
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own
a farm in the terms of freedom of makeover including my opinion.

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with, the
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land provides an opportunity to save money for future
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use
,
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because
most of the
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rental
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house
includes the cost for heat and water.
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So
, it will become cheaper to
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live
.
For example
, if a student will take a room on the lease, then he/she
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pay extra money for hydro
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and the rent for one-room will be within $350 to $500,
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pay the full amount for the mortgage every month excluding hydro and water bill if he will
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.
Overall
, when a person can
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with $550
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, then why he will pay extra,
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to become an owner of the home.

On the other hand
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important
factors which
are considered
by everyone during
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own
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.
For instance
, when someone
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lives
in a
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apartment, he/she can not do the things which they might wish to do in order to decorate their rooms like-wallpapers, hanging pictures on the walls and furniture
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because
it might not be
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owner or
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think
that it is difficult for him to
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move
with the furniture from one place to another.
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So
, if he will
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buy
his
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own
home, then he can put the wallpaper and pictures on the walls
as well
as
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buy
the new furniture to decorate the rooms.

To conclude
, this essay discussed why it is
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to take
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plot or to
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own
a property. In my opinion, I believe that it is
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good
to
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live
by paying the lease
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only
not the mortgage until you actually need it.
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IELTS essay some people think it is better to rent an accommodation than own it. while others disagree saying that owning a property has many advantages.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
358 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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