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Some people think it is better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who some time disagrees with them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.3

Some people think it is better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who some time disagrees with them. v. 3
Not anyone is an island of knowledge, disagreement is a natural issue that is bound to happen. It is often thought by some that it is preferable to have close allies that share the same view with them. Others feel it is ideal to have close partners who at times differ in their own perspective. In my opinion, I believe a major way to be a better person in life is to have different opinions of others. On the one hand, people who are surrounded by folks who share the same opinion with them sees things from one angle only. This is to say that there is not any difference in their thoughts and that of their close counterparts. In other words, their thinking and orientation about life is channeled towards a particular direction. As a result, new ideas are not able to spring forth therefore, they are limited to the knowledge within their reach. On the other hand, others feel it is a good thing to have some form of disagreement in terms of views and opinions and I agree. This is due to the fact that discord often brings about new ideas and innovations. This is a good way to learn and become better in all areas. Furthermore, people who have conflicting ideas are vast owing to a lot of information they have come across therefore they are able to compete with the world outside. For instance, in my organization as a management staff, issues are brought to the table for everyone to contribute and learn from. This alone has made me understand how to approach diverse matters that faces me. In conclusion, while people may have a varying opinion, I believe that there should be room for various ideas from which people can learn from. By doing this, people are able to expand their knowledge and apply it to their daily pursuit.
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that it is preferable to have close allies that share the same view with them. Others feel it is ideal to have close partners
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who
at times differ in their
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own
perspective. In my
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opinion
, I believe a major way to be a better person in life is to have
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different
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opinions
of others.

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people
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who
are surrounded
by folks
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who
share the same
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opinion
with them
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sees
things from one angle
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only
. This is to say that there is not any difference in their thoughts and that of their close counterparts. In
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other
words, their thinking and orientation about life
is channeled
towards a particular direction.
As a result
, new
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ideas
are not able to spring forth
therefore
, they
are limited
to the knowledge within their reach.

On the
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other
hand, others feel it is a
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good
thing to have
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some
form of disagreement in terms of views and
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opinions
and I
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agree
.
This is due to the fact that
discord
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often
brings about new
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ideas
and innovations. This is a
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good
way to learn and become better in all areas.
Furthermore
,
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people
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who
have conflicting
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ideas
are vast owing to
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a lot of
information they have
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come
across
therefore
they are able to compete with the world outside.
For instance
, in my organization as a management staff, issues
are brought
to the table for everyone to contribute and learn from. This alone has made me understand how to approach diverse matters that faces me.

In conclusion
, while
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people
may have a varying
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opinion
, I believe that there should be room for various
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ideas
from which
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people
can learn from. By doing this,
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people
are able to expand their knowledge and apply it to their daily pursuit.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think it is better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who some time disagrees with them. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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