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some people spend a lot of money on things that are unnecessary while some people in this world do not get over anything to eat why do you think people do it but can be done to stop them for doing so

some people spend a lot of money on things that are unnecessary while some people in this world do not get over anything to eat why do you think people do it but can be done to stop them for doing so anpY
food is necessary for every individual who is living in this world and it plays a crucial role in every people life few masses waste a lot of money on those things which are not usable for mandatory for them on the other hand many human beings surviving in this world without eating food this essay in is to investigate the causes of this and what can be the solution of it. To commerce with first and the foremost is that people with higher income spend their money on unnecessary things as they do not know the value of money be show their status as some time they by excess of things which are not valuable for them such as they buy moreclothes which are not much needed for them. Moreover, some people think that by buying more things they can enhance their living standard further more individuals maKe excess of food their houses and when they do not eat complete food and so they put that food in garbage. Apart from it, government of that particular country, should encourage their citizens and start and many projects to overcome this problem. Fm example, in 2008, when the people of America facing major problem of starvation, so then ruling body initiated many plans to get rid of this problem and after few months the government got a positive result and in 2010, they completely solve this problem. After that, we do not completely depend on government, it is the responsibility of every individual also. They also play a vital role to overcome this problem by helping poorer people, who are not able to get fiod and buy clothing, they can also help some children. In conclusion I want to say that people only by those things which are important for them and sum of money they save by this process or donate that money to the poor people
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food
is necessary for every individual who is living in this world and it plays a crucial role in every
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people
life few masses waste
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a lot of
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money
on those things which are not usable for mandatory for them
on the other hand
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many
human beings surviving in this world without eating
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food
this essay in is to investigate the causes of this and what can be the solution of it. To commerce with
first
and the foremost is that
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people
with higher income spend their
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money
on unnecessary things as they do not know the value of
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money
be
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show
their status as
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some
time they
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by
excess of things which are not valuable for them such as they
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buy
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moreclothes
which are not
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much needed
for them.
Moreover
,
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some
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people
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think
that by buying more things they can enhance their living standard
further
more individuals
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maKe
excess of
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food
their
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houses
and when they do not eat complete
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food and
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so
they put that
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food
in garbage.

Apart from it,
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government
of that particular country, should encourage their citizens and
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start
and
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many
projects to overcome this
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problem
.
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Fm example
, in 2008, when the
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people
of America facing major
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problem
of starvation,
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so
then ruling body initiated
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many
plans to
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get
rid of this
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problem
and after few months the
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government
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got
a
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positive
result and in 2010, they completely solve this
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problem
. After that, we do not completely depend on
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government
, it is the responsibility of every individual
also
. They
also
play a vital role to overcome this
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problem
by helping poorer
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people
, who are not able to
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get
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fiod
and
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buy
clothing, they can
also
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help
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some
children. In
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conclusion I
want to say that
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people
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only
by those things which are
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important
for them and sum of
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money
they save by this process or donate that
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money
to the poor
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people

IELTS essay some people spend a lot of money on things that are unnecessary while some people in this world do not get over anything to eat why do you think people do it but can be done to stop them for doing so

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  American English
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316 words
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