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Some people think that the public health of a country peoplecan be improved if the government make laws regarding nutritious food butothers think that it is a matter of personal choice and personalresponsibility.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that the public health of a country peoplecan be improved if the government make laws regarding nutritious food butothers think that it is a matter of personal choice and personalresponsibility. 7R65
these days, increasing pollution the population diversity and healthy lifestyle. The government plays an indispensable role to overcome these problems. Some opine that several laws should be passed to protect the public health while others opposed of this notion as they consider that the choice of food is personal of individuals.  To begin with, a healthy lifestyle and habit is the choice of their own. No matters how many laws are passed and how strictly prohibited eating habits. If a individual does not follow the healthy habits, he will surely affected by various diseases including obesity, heart problems and soon. Thus the choice of eating greatly affected the overall condition of anation. For instance, the people of developed countries has suffered In obesity and other harmful ailments. To lead healthy life, the public not always need healthy food and gym facilities for their existence, they only need proper awareness.  On the other hand, selling expired foods, adhesives and other things Such as chemicals should be banned. The government Can only ensurethat. If people allowed to eat preservative foods which is actually out ofdated, this will greatly influence the body function. Additionally, the companies knew about the threats but they are ignoring. Further brands areplaying with the life of humans by selling harmful fast foods. Therefore, it is the responsibility of organizations to take action against this issue to secure the community life.  To conclude, before taking to eat checking of expiry is prominentfor every item. For this they need to acquire knowledge about their merits and demerits. Personally I believe eating food is not a major crime it is the necessity of everyone. However, a liability of state departments to take initiatives in order to save the life of public.
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these
days, increasing pollution the population diversity and
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healthy
lifestyle. The
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government
plays an indispensable role to overcome these problems.
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Some
opine that several laws should
be passed
to protect the public health while others opposed of this notion as they consider that the choice of
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food
is personal of individuals.  To
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begin
with, a
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healthy
lifestyle and habit is the choice of their
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own
. No matters how
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many
laws
are passed
and how
strictly
prohibited eating habits. If
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a
individual does not follow the
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healthy
habits, he will
surely
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affected
by various diseases including obesity, heart problems and
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soon
.
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Thus
the choice of eating
greatly
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affected
the
overall
condition of
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anation
.
For instance
, the
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people
of
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developed countries
has suffered In obesity and
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other
harmful ailments. To lead
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healthy
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life
, the public not always need
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healthy
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food
and gym facilities for their existence, they
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only
need proper awareness.  On the
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other
hand, selling expired
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foods
, adhesives and
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other
things Such as chemicals should
be banned
. The
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government
Can
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only
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ensurethat
. If
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people
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allowed
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to eat
preservative
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foods
which is actually out
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ofdated
, this will
greatly
influence the body function.
Additionally
, the
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companies
knew about the threats
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but
they are ignoring.
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Further
brands
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areplaying
with the
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life
of humans by selling harmful
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fast
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foods
.
Therefore
, it is the responsibility of organizations to take action against this issue to secure the community
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life
.  
To conclude
,
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before
taking to eat checking of expiry is
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prominentfor
every item. For this they need to acquire knowledge about their merits and demerits.
Personally
I believe eating
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food
is not a major crime it is the necessity of everyone.
However
, a liability of state departments to take initiatives in order to save the
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life
of public.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the public health of a country peoplecan be improved if the government make laws regarding nutritious food butothers think that it is a matter of personal choice and personalresponsibility.

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290 words
5.5
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