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Some people says that sun is important for at do you agree or disagree

Some people says that sun is important for at 2KoNJ
Without doubt we know all that sun is the most powerful and important source of earth I completely agree with the statement that son is important to act in many ways I will discuss my point in coming paragraph. First and foremost reason son gives us lot of energy it helps our planet different ways first and foremost is it provides proteins vitamins for our body for example if your person suffering from there is no immunity then he can stand under the sunlight at morning I was taken for ages vitamins. Similarly this and helps to produce plants to grow healthy with the plans we can get it pours flowers and vitamins important. Secondly Sons provides energy through solar power plants which can we reduce the electricity bill also helps in all sectors like health industries and how is this houses for instant at present the week has a lot of problem with a cold mining government also encourage the Go green society. In additional we has a lot of payment in the first few decades from this so without son we can’t survive the biggest star on at the end also the nearest store at which we can be very strong. To sum up I would like to repeat that without son there is no life on earth.
Without
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doubt we
know all that sun is the most powerful and
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important
source of earth I completely
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agree
with the statement that
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son
is
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important
to act in
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many
ways I will discuss my point in coming paragraph.

First
and foremost reason
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son
gives us lot of energy it
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helps
our planet
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different
ways
first
and foremost is it provides proteins vitamins for our body
for example
if your person suffering from there is no immunity then he can stand under the sunlight at morning I
was taken
for ages vitamins.
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Similarly
this and
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helps
to produce plants to grow healthy with the plans we can
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get
it pours flowers and vitamins
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important
.

Secondly
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Sons
provides energy through solar power plants which can we
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reduce
the electricity bill
also
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helps
in all sectors like health industries and how is this
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houses
for instant at present the week has
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a lot of problem
with a
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cold
mining
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government
also
encourage the Go green society. In additional we
The pronoun 'we' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: "have", "haven"
has
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a lot of
payment in the
first
few decades from this
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so
without
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son
we can’t survive the biggest star on at the
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end
also
the nearest store at which we can be
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very
strong.

To sum up I would like to repeat that without
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son
there is no life on earth.
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IELTS essay Some people says that sun is important for at

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
220 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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