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Some people says it is impossible to live in big cities. What measure can be taken to solve this problem

Some people says it is impossible to live in big cities. What measure can be taken to solve this problem g5AL1
In this fast paced world, people are more concerned about their career. It has been seen that, urbanisation has become a topic of debate these days. Many people argue that, living status is not possible in the cities. This essay is an attempt to figure out some causes and find out some solutions for this problem with examples. To begin with, supporters of the people have their own points. First and foremost, overpopulation is a big threat in cities. To be elucidated, most of the people are educated. So, they access first priority to their career, education and so on. Apart from that, many of the people migrate in cities that make huge differences in population. As a result which makes stressful activity and also badly Affect to the health conditions. For instance, every house made without any gap or a distance that make no privacy for the family members. However, there are many measures can be taken to reduce this population. Government should campaign birth control program for couples and try to make more facilities in rural areas. Secondly, In this modern world, activity is very expensive in cities. To be specified, every person tries to choose good flat, dress, good school that makes a hectic growth. Along that, people are more concentrated on how making money for the future. As it created big issues in each family budget and also consumerism will be happen. Even though, use of recycling and avoid throw away culture among parents definitely control this problem. To be continued, another problem is that, traffic jams are always common in urban areas. Similarly, people use their own vehicles that produce congestion rate and fuels. The fruitful step is that, the government should provide stringent laws against transportation. Along that, public transportation should be the first option for every family. To be concluded, after analysing these aspects, there are many pros and cons in city growth. Although, matured and educated people can manage this and it will eradicated according to the interest of each person.
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paced world,
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are more concerned about their career. It has been
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seen
that,
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urbanisation
has become a topic of debate these days.
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people
argue that, living status is not possible in the
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cities
. This essay is an attempt to figure out
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some
causes and find out
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some
solutions for this problem with examples.

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with, supporters of the
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people
have their
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own
points.
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and foremost, overpopulation is a
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big
threat in
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cities
. To
be elucidated
, most of the
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people
are educated
.
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So
, they access
first
priority to their career, education and
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on. Apart from that,
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many
of the
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people
migrate in
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cities
that
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make
huge differences in population.
As a result
which
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makes
stressful activity and
also
badly
Affect to the health conditions.

For instance
, every
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house
made without any gap or a distance that
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make
no privacy for the family members.
However
, there are
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many
measures can
be taken
to
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reduce
this population.
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Government
should campaign birth control program for couples and try to
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make
more facilities in rural areas.

Secondly
, In this modern world, activity is
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very
expensive in
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cities
. To
be specified
, every person tries to choose
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good
flat, dress,
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good
school that
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makes
a hectic growth. Along that,
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people
are more concentrated on how making money for the future. As it created
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big
issues in each family budget and
also
consumerism will be
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happen
.
Even though
,
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use
of recycling and avoid throw away culture among parents definitely control this problem.

To
be continued
, another problem is that, traffic jams are always common in urban areas.
Similarly
,
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people
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use
their
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own
vehicles that produce congestion rate and fuels. The fruitful step is that, the
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government
should provide stringent laws against transportation. Along that, public transportation should be the
first
option for every family.

To
be concluded
, after
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analysing
these aspects, there are
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many
pros and cons in city growth. Although, matured and educated
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people
can manage this and it will
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eradicated
according to the interest of each person.
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IELTS essay Some people says it is impossible to live in big cities. What measure can be taken to solve this problem

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
339 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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