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Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it. How true is this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that cannot learn by watching programmes and films about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience. v.1

Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it. How true is this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that cannot learn by watching programmes and films about it? v. 1
As more shows and movies are now able to allow us to gain an insight into different cultures and customs, some might claim that we can understand more about the world outside simply by watching it on TV. While it might be true in some true in some cases, I believe that there are a range of unexplored corners of the Earth that could never be seen on any television programmes. From my viewpoint, I can understand why some people point to the view that television programmes and films is a vital source of information about another country. In today’s fast-growing world, the majority of nations and regions all want to introduce their various lifestyles and traditions to the whole world in order to develop the tourist industry and generate more revenue from it. As a result, hundreds of reality shows and documentaries about a specific community or region are broadcast on a regular basis, which hopefully catches the attention of as many international tourists as possible. For instance, I have learned about Carnival festivals which are celebrated annually in South America countries thanks to lots of televised programmes. However, I believe that no matter how many shows we watch on TV, there are many remote hidden parts of the world that human beings are still clueless about, ranging from the eastern peninsula of Russia to the world’s oldest desert Namib. Due to the harsh climate and uninhabitable environment, such places remain unaffected from the rest of the world, which means that an average viewer will never be able to know anything about those remote areas. On the other hand, avid travellers in these cases can obtain a better understanding of the far-flung destinations where they are going to explore or study. A family, for example, reported that they had become more knowledgeable and been able to live comfortably in nature thanks to their stay with an Amazon tribe. In conclusion, it seems to me that television can help us all to know about the wider world but there are still undiscovered secrets that haven’t been published on this important public service.
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shows
and movies are
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now
able to
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allow
us to gain an insight into
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different
cultures and customs,
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some
might claim that we can understand more about the
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world
outside
simply
by watching it on TV. While it might be true in
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some
true in
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some
cases, I believe that there are a range of unexplored corners of the Earth that could never be
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seen
on any television
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programmes
.

From my viewpoint, I can understand why
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some
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people
point to the view that television
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programmes
and films is a vital source of information about another country. In
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today
’s
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fast
-growing
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world
, the majority of nations and regions all want to introduce their various lifestyles and traditions to the whole
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world
in order to develop the tourist industry and generate more revenue from it.
As a result
, hundreds of reality
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
and documentaries about a specific community or region are broadcast on a regular basis, which
hopefully
catches the attention of as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
international tourists as possible.
For instance
, I have learned about Carnival festivals which
are celebrated
annually
in South America countries thanks to lots of televised
Possible spelling mistake. 'programmes' is British English.
programmes
.

However
, I believe that no matter how
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many
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shows
we
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watch
on TV, there are
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many
Make sure that the adjective 'remote' is correct. Possibly, it should be an adverb (typically ~ly) that modifies 'hidden'. Possibly, it should be the first word in a compound adjective (hyphenated adjective). Possibly, it is correct.
remote hidden
parts of the
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world
that human beings are
still
clueless about, ranging from the eastern peninsula of Russia to the
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world’s
oldest desert
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Namib
. Due to the harsh climate and uninhabitable environment, such places remain unaffected from the rest of the
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world
, which means that an average viewer will never be able to know anything about those remote areas.
On the other hand
, avid
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travellers
in these cases can obtain a better understanding of the far-flung destinations where they are going to explore or study. A family,
for example
, reported that they had become more knowledgeable and been able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
comfortably
in nature thanks to their stay with an Amazon tribe.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that television can
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help
us all to know about the wider
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world
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but
there are
still
undiscovered secrets that haven’t
been published
on this
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important
public service.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people say that you can learn more about another country by watching television programmes and films about it than by actually visiting it. How true is this statement? Is there anything you can learn about another country by visiting it that cannot learn by watching programmes and films about it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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