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Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?

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In this modern era, the Internet plays a vital role in every aspect of human life. It is believed that the Internet provides better facility that improved better communication with people and connectivity, resulting in an accessible word. I completely agree with the statement and I will justify my view in the following paragraphs. The first and foremost advantage of having internet for communication is easy to connect with people in anytime and no matter how the person far is. To explain it further, earlier it was a time consuming process. To pass the message to our loved ones, the letter takes 1 week to reach or sometimes more than that. But, in present day, thd number of facility such as email, whatsapp, video calls to stay connected with our near and dear ones. Modern computer and mobile application makes our lide easy to connect with our loved one anytime we want. Moreover, ease to accessing technology has increased internet users dramatically. For instance, the Times of India reported in March 2019 that over 85% of people were using the Internet to communicate than ever before. Thus, it is beneficial to use the Internet for connecting with individuals. Another aspects to the success of the Internet is its exponentially falling service charges. To elaborate it, earlier the cost of the ISD calls was too high for ordinary people to afford. However, rapid growth of advance technology and Internet service providers made easier to communicate and a lot of competitor of service provider has decreased their service charges. This has proven a boon for internet users. To exemplify, earlier the callinh charges of New Delhi to London was around 100 rupees. But, now it is almost a free of cost to call with the Internet. Hence, internet made accessible world to communicate. In conclusion, I believe it is beneficial to have internet for communication with individuals by easy and economical way.
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is believed
that the Internet provides better facility that
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improved
better communication with
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people
and connectivity, resulting in an accessible word. I completely
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agree
with the statement and I will justify my view in the following paragraphs.

The
first
and foremost advantage of having internet for communication is easy to connect with
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people
in anytime and no matter how the person far is. To
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explain
it
further
, earlier it was a
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time consuming
process. To pass the message to our
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loved
ones, the letter takes 1 week to reach or
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sometimes
more than that.
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But
, in present day,
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number of facility such as email,
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whatsapp
, video calls to stay connected with our near and dear ones. Modern computer and mobile application
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makes
our
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lide
easy to connect with our
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loved
one anytime we want.
Moreover
,
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ease
to accessing technology has increased internet users
dramatically
.
For instance
,
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the Times of India
reported in March 2019 that over 85% of
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people
were using the Internet to communicate than ever
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before
.
Thus
, it is beneficial to
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use
the Internet for connecting with individuals.

Another aspects to the success of the Internet is
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its
exponentially
falling
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service
charges. To elaborate it, earlier the cost of the ISD calls was too high for ordinary
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people
to afford.
However
, rapid growth of advance technology and Internet
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service
providers made easier to communicate and
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a lot of competitor
of
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service
provider has decreased their
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service
charges. This has proven a boon for internet users. To exemplify, earlier the
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callinh
charges of New Delhi to London was around 100 rupees.
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But
,
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now
it is almost a free of cost to call with the Internet.
Hence
, internet made accessible world to communicate.

In conclusion
, I believe it is beneficial to have internet for communication with individuals by easy and economical way.
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IELTS essay Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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