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Some people say that nowadays children have an easy life, and some people think that the life of children was easier in the past. Discuss both points of view and also provide relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people say that nowadays children have an easy life, and some people think that the life of children was easier in the past. xODna
Childhood is considered as a best part of life. One school of thought avers, “in today’s world, lives of children are full of comfortable”, while others do not concur with the statement. What things make children’s lives easier? I will delve deeper to explain both the views. At the outset, education system has gone through a sea change. In the contemporary epoch, a plethora of educational toys have been developed which are not only considered as source of entertainment but also educate the children. The result of this is that infants can learn while playing, and it does not create stress on their brain. To illustrate, a report by ‘The Times of India’ has revealed that children, who learned from practical things, can comprehends musings much faster than that of others who studied from books. Furthermore, early marriage system has been cancelled which was a hurdle in children’s carrier. The benefit of this is that children can focus on their carrier. Apart from this, equal emancipations have been given to girls, and they are not being captivated in four walls. On the other hand side, crime rate did not exist in the past, due to this children can roamed anywhere, and they did not have any restrictions. Last but not least, there was no cut-throat competition in the past for jobs therefore, children were remain engaged in physical activities which had made them internally and externally stronger. To conclude, although in the past children’s lives was less stressful, these things are implausible in today’s world.
Childhood
is considered
as
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a
best part of life. One school of
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thought
avers, “in
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today
’s world,
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lives
of
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children
are full of comfortable”, while others do not concur with the statement. What things
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make
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children’s
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lives
easier? I will delve deeper to
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explain
both the views.

At the outset, education system has gone through a sea
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change
. In the contemporary epoch, a plethora of educational toys have
been developed
which are not
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only
considered as source of entertainment
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but
also
educate the
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children
. The result of this is that infants can learn while playing, and it does not create
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stress
on their brain. To illustrate, a report by ‘The Times of India’ has revealed that
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children
, who learned from practical things, can
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comprehends
musings much faster than that of others who studied from books.
Furthermore
, early marriage system has
been cancelled
which was a hurdle in
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children’s
carrier. The benefit of this is that
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children
can focus on their carrier. Apart from this, equal
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emancipations
have been
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given
to girls, and they are not
being captivated
in four walls.

On the other hand
side, crime rate did not exist in the past, due to
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this
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children
can roamed anywhere, and they did not have any restrictions. Last
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but
not least, there was no
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cut
-throat competition in the past for jobs
therefore
,
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children
were
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remain
engaged in physical activities which had made them
internally
and
externally
stronger.

To conclude
, although in the past
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children’s
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lives
was less stressful, these things are implausible in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
’s world.

IELTS essay Some people say that nowadays children have an easy life, and some people think that the life of children was easier in the past.

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255 words
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