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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Undeniably, music plays a crucial role in our lives and eliminates distinctions and differences among various cultures and generations. It symbolises harmony and reflects humanity. I quite agree that music helps bring people from various cultures and generations together. One of the reasons music excretes the hurdles among different nations and cultures is that people enjoy music from every part of the world, and it speaks the same language, which embodies human emotion, joy, love and sorrow. Music does not need interpretation to be enjoyed and understood as it touches our heart and resonates in our mind. No matter what language we speak or understand, we appreciate the melody and depth of music which is why people of all ages can sit together and enjoy the same music. Moreover, nations influence each other with the type of music they produce and the type of musical instruments they use. This amalgamation reduces cultural differences and brings people from different cultures and ages to a common platform. For example, many music genres, that we enjoy these days, were derived from multiple nations and cultures and people from all these cultures enjoy and love them. Music is an art form which is enjoyed by all, and this helps reduce the generation and age gaps among people. For instance, when the national anthem is played, child, adults and elders all tune to the same emotion, which is patriotism, and their unity is stronger than ever. The same can be said when music evokes other emotions like love, sadness and so on. Besides, some music categories are loved by all, and the listeners feel a sense of togetherness in a divine way which is almost absent in other art forms. It not only eliminates age gaps but also the generation and cultural gaps. In conclusion, music, as a universally accepted and supreme art form, enriches our lives and strengthens the connections between us, regardless of our backgrounds, culture and age.
Undeniably
,
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music
plays a crucial role in our
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lives
and eliminates distinctions and differences among various
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cultures
and generations. It
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symbolises
harmony and reflects humanity. I quite
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agree
that
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music
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helps
bring
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people
from various
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cultures
and generations together.

One of the reasons
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music
excretes the hurdles among
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different
nations and
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cultures
is that
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people
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enjoy
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music
from every part of the world, and it speaks the same language, which embodies human emotion, joy,
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love
and sorrow.
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Music
does not need interpretation to
be enjoyed
and understood as it touches our heart and resonates in our mind. No matter what language we speak or understand, we appreciate the melody and depth of
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music
which is why
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people
of all
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ages
can sit together and
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enjoy
the same music.

Moreover
, nations influence each other with the type of
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music
they produce and the type of musical instruments they
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use
. This amalgamation
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reduces
cultural differences and brings
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people
from
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different
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cultures
and
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ages
to a common platform.
For example
,
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many
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music
genres, that we
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enjoy
these days,
were derived
from multiple nations and
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cultures
and
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people
from all these
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cultures
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enjoy
and
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love
them.

Music is an art form which
is enjoyed
by all, and this
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helps
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reduce
the generation and
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age
gaps among
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people
.
For instance
, when the national anthem
is played
, child, adults and elders all tune to the same emotion, which is patriotism, and their unity is stronger than ever. The same can
be said
when
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music
evokes other emotions like
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love
, sadness and
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so
on.
Besides
,
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some
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music
categories are
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loved
by all, and the listeners feel a sense of togetherness in a divine way which is almost absent in other art forms. It not
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only
eliminates
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age
gaps
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but
also
the generation and cultural gaps.

In conclusion
,
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music
, as a
universally
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accepted
and supreme art form, enriches our
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lives
and strengthens the connections between us, regardless of our backgrounds,
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culture
and
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age
.
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IELTS essay Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together with this opinion.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
325 words
6.5
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