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Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier. while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, there has commonly been a huge amount of debate regard to this matter, majority of individuals assume that the arrival of new technologies such as online shopping apps and some gadgets which are used in malls have made purchasing items simple, and I fully agree with this. On contrary, some persons disagree with that. In this essay, we will discuss both points. From what I can see, with the invention of online apps shopping is more convenient in comparison to the old trend. For instance, you want to buy a watch, and you just have to tap some buttons on your smart phone, in next 3-4 days your watch will be at your wrist. Without going outside of your home, you have got your desired item. Recently, the whole world was affected badly by the COVID-19 virus, to reduce the spread all the governments had ordered all the shopping complexes to shut down, and this lockdown was for almost 1year in Canada. To deal with this problem people used various online apps such as amazon, e-bay, shopping-cart etc. , to buy all their essential items. I think if this technology was not available at that time then people had to suffer more difficulties at the time of lockdown. On the other hand, some persons are completely against this trend because they think that internet shopping is affecting the local shop owners as well as the big shopping malls, and, no doubt, this is the fact that online shopping is the main cause for many business failures. For example, a survey was conducted by the BBC news channel which states that 40% local shops had faced shut down because of this and that survey also shows, in the last year 58% more job opportunities has been created by internet shopping apps. To conclude, in my perspective, modern ways of shopping delivers more benefits than harms. This is the fact that this trend has destroyed some business dealers, but it also gives many other business opportunities, and its advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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commonly
been a huge amount of debate regard to this matter, majority of individuals assume that the arrival of new technologies such as
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online
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shopping
apps and
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some
gadgets which are
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used
in malls have made purchasing items simple, and I
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agree
with this. On contrary,
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some
persons disagree with that. In this essay, we will discuss both points.

From what I can
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, with the invention of
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online
apps
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shopping
is more convenient
in comparison
to the
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old
trend.
For instance
, you want to
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buy
a
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watch
, and you
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have to
tap
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some
buttons on your smart phone, in
next
3-4 days your
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watch
will be at your wrist. Without going
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outside of
your home, you have
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got
your desired item. Recently, the whole world was
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affected
badly
by the COVID-19 virus, to
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reduce
the spread all the
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governments
had ordered all the
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shopping
complexes to shut down, and this lockdown was for almost 1year in Canada. To deal with this problem
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people
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used
various
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online
apps such as
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amazon
, e-bay, shopping-cart etc.
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,
to
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all their essential items. I
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think
if this technology was not available at that time then
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people
had to suffer more difficulties at the time of lockdown.

On the other hand
,
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some
persons are completely against this trend
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because
they
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think
that internet
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shopping
is affecting the local shop owners
as well
as the
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big
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shopping
malls, and, no doubt, this is the fact that
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online
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shopping
is the main cause for
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many
business failures.
For example
, a survey
was conducted
by the BBC news channel which states that 40% local shops had faced shut down
because of this
and that survey
also
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shows
, in the last year 58% more job opportunities has
been created
by internet
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shopping
apps.

To conclude
, in my perspective, modern ways of
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shopping
delivers more benefits than harms. This is the fact that this trend has
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destroyed
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some
business dealers,
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but
it
also
gives
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many
other business opportunities, and its advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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IELTS essay Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier. while others disagree.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
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