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Some people say that marks should be the only criteria for university selection. Others claim this should not be the case and everyone should get the chance. Examine both views and provide a conclusion

Some people say that marks should be the only criteria for university selection. Others claim this should not be the case and everyone should get the chance. Examine both views and provide a conclusion JoV06
There is a general notion among many proponents of university education, that it should be provided free or cost, only to the younger pupils who score the highest score in examinations. Whereas, there is also a group of people who do not iterate the above point of view, and generally stand in favour, of making university education available to all, irrespective of marks scored and applicant age. In this essay, we will critically examine both the viewpoints. Firstly, making academic performance as a sole criteria for university selection, will definitely result in a educationally focused diaspora, as the pupils selected will be more academically inclined. Secondly, the whole scheme of selection, especially in case of those colleges, which receive a lot of applications, will be more streamlined. Thirdly, this kind of selection will result in producing a future workforce, who have proven their competency in the past, and therefore would be more professionally focused and equipped. According to the proponents of this scheme of selection, pupils who had proven their mettle in the past, will get a fair chance at the college education, and with respect to the mentioned advantages, will help weed out the not so serious candidates. University education is a basic need, and is very much sought after, especially among the youth, who aspire to land a high paying job, which in turn would help them get settled in life. Basing the eligibility criteria, on marks scored during school years, will result in exclusion of a vast majority of students, which in turn will lead to a lot of dissatisfied youth, vying for a meaningful means of employment. The school curriculum is very general and does not cater to individual competencies. University education is more specific and an aspirant will have chances to score better and prove his mettle. Hence, basing the admissions on marks scored and age, would be a big injustice to all future aspirants. To sum this topic up, we have to balance both the point of views, keeping in mind the current job scenario and competition among the peers for employment. Although the first point of view is theoretically sound and may produce academically brighter results, however, we have to keep in mind the practical scheme of things, before coming to a conclusion. It is impossible to restrict human aspirations, specifically those of students aspiring for a degree, basis school grades. To be fair, to one and all, we should stand by the second viewpoint and be a proponent of free and fair universal education
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proponents of
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university
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education
, that it should
be provided
free or cost,
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to the younger pupils
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who
score the highest score in examinations. Whereas, there is
also
a group of
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people
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who
do not iterate the above point of view, and
generally
stand in
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, of making
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university
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education
available to all, irrespective of marks scored and applicant age. In this essay, we will
critically
examine both the viewpoints.

Firstly
, making academic performance as a sole
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criteria
for
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university
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selection
, will definitely
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result
in
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educationally
focused diaspora, as the pupils selected will be more
academically
inclined.
Secondly
, the whole scheme of
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selection
,
especially
in case of those colleges, which receive
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a lot of
applications, will be more streamlined.
Thirdly
, this kind of
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selection
will
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result
in producing a future workforce,
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who
have proven their competency in the past, and
therefore
would be more
professionally
focused and equipped. According to the proponents of this scheme of
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selection
, pupils
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who
had proven their mettle in the past, will
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get
a
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fair
chance at the college
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education
, and with respect to the mentioned advantages, will
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help
weed out the not
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so
serious candidates.

University
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education
is a basic need, and is
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much sought after,
especially
among the youth,
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who
aspire to land a high paying job, which in turn would
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help
them
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get
settled in life. Basing the eligibility criteria, on marks scored during school years, will
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result
in exclusion of a vast majority of students, which in turn will lead to
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a lot of
dissatisfied youth, vying for a meaningful means of employment. The school curriculum is
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very
general and does not cater to individual competencies.
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University
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education
is more specific and an aspirant will have chances to score better and prove his mettle.
Hence
, basing the admissions on marks scored and age, would be a
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big
injustice to all future aspirants.

To sum this topic up, we
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have to
balance both the point of views, keeping in mind the
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current
job scenario and competition among the peers for employment. Although the
first
point of view is
theoretically
sound and may produce
academically
brighter
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results
,
however
, we
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have to
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keep
in mind the practical scheme of things,
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before
coming to a conclusion. It is impossible to restrict human aspirations,
specifically
those of students aspiring for a degree, basis school grades. To be
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fair
, to one and all, we should stand by the second viewpoint and be a proponent of free and
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fair
universal
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education

IELTS essay Some people say that marks should be the only criteria for university selection. Others claim this should not be the case and everyone should get the chance. Examine both views and provide a conclusion

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