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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

While Some people believe that it is possible to identify a person’s cultural background and personal traits based on the way they dress, I side with those who disagree because such information cannot be gained based on clothes, and doing so might lead to social issues in the community. Attempting to guess some personal information about people such as their culture or character by examining how they dress could cause social problems including social exclusion and encourage anti-social behavior. This happens when certain groups are categorized as dangerous, for instance, based on their outfits. To illustrate, Muslim women in the Western world are being under attack by extremists who identify them by the way they cover their hair. For these reasons, people should not try to predict the culture or the character of a person based on the clothes they chose to wear. Furthermore, classifying individuals based on what they wear is unfair and could lead to misjudgments. Oftentimes people do not know the circumstances under which the person decided to wear a particular outfit. For example, if a person procrastinates and delays doing their laundry, they will end up wearing any available clean outfit which does not indicate any information about that person. As a result, the speculations people make by examining clothes choices cannot be used to determine the culture and character of a person. In conclusion, Although some people agree that clothes reveal the person’s culture and character, I believe it is inappropriate to guess the cultural background and character of people and classifying them based on what they wear as it could lead to misjudgments and may result in violence.
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by examining how they dress could cause social problems including social exclusion and encourage anti-social behavior. This happens when certain groups
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dangerous
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for instance
, based on their outfits. To illustrate, Muslim women in the Western world are being under attack by extremists who identify them by the way they cover their hair. For these reasons,
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people
should not try to predict the
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culture
or the
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character
of a
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person
based on the
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they chose to wear.

Furthermore
, classifying individuals based on what they wear is unfair and could lead to misjudgments. Oftentimes
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people
do not know the circumstances under which the
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person
decided to wear a particular outfit.
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person
procrastinates and delays doing their laundry, they will
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, I believe it is inappropriate to guess the cultural background and
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and classifying them based on what they wear as it could lead to misjudgments and may result in violence.
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IELTS essay Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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