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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree o disagree? v.6

Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree o disagree? v. 6
Some people believe that people’s cloth can represent where they come from and who they are. Personally, while I agree to this point of view to some extent, I think it is not easy to tell people’s culture and personalities from their clothing. On the one hand, there is no doubt that people wear certain cloth to express their culture and themselves. For example, a lot of people free in red during Chinese New year, which means happiness and blessing in Chinese culture. Another example is that people who in favor of hip-pop culture normally ear bat hats, T-shirts and sneakers. Those people are proud of this culture so they are happy to be recognized by others through clothing. On the other hand, more and more people wear things that have nothing to do with their culture or characters, especially in the consumption culture nowadays. This can simply be explained by the fact that many people tend to choose cloth that are popular and trending discard any cultural or personal meanings. Furthermore, some people wear certain cloth just for fun. To illustrate that, some countries, including China and Korean, start to celebrate Halloweens. Kids and their parents wear costumes and ask for candies, despite the facet that it is not a traditional holiday in any of these Asian countries. For these people, it is more of an interesting activity that they can enjoy the time with kids and friends, other than a cultural event. Therefore, it is less possible to tell people’s culture due to the global environment. In conclusion, although I agree that people’s clothing sometimes tells their culture and character, it is less likely in other cases because people care less about these things when choose what to wear.
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and personalities from their clothing.

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people
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wear
certain
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cloth
to express their
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culture
and themselves.
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people
free in red during Chinese New year, which means happiness and blessing in Chinese
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culture
. Another example is that
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people
who in favor of hip-pop
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culture
normally
ear bat hats, T-shirts and sneakers. Those
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people
are proud of this
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culture
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so
they are happy to
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by others through clothing.

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hand, more and more
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people
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things that have nothing to do with their
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tend to choose
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that are popular and trending discard any cultural or personal meanings.
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for fun. To illustrate that,
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countries, including China and Korean,
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to celebrate Halloweens. Kids and their parents
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wear
costumes and
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candies, despite the facet that it is not a traditional holiday in any of these Asian countries. For these
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people
, it is more of an interesting activity that they can enjoy the time with kids and friends,
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other
than a cultural
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event
.
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, it is less possible to
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people’s
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culture
due to the global environment.

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care less about these things when choose what to
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7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree o disagree? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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