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Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy to be healthy and fit if they want to be.

Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy to be healthy and fit if they want to be. ODOy
One of the big issues in some parts of the world today is that of unhealthy lifestyles and the effects that unhealthy lifestyles have on people and society. This is not just a personal issue, it is a social and medical one. For a lot of people, it is easy to have an unhealthy lifestyle. They spend most of their time sitting at desks at work. In fact, this has become more and more true of people over time, because jobs that involved physical movement have been replaced by jobs involving computers. Another reason is that they use their cars for every journey instead of walking sometimes. So they get very little exercise, and this is very bad for them. And many people, in particular young people, spend a lot of their free time sitting down and looking at screens. They watch movies or play computer games all the time, instead of going out and doing sport and taking exercise. Food is another issue. Nowadays, many people eat junk food all the time and this is very bad for you. People are very aware of this issue and they want to stay fit and healthy in most places, it is not difficult to do this. There are gyms and fitness centers where people can go, and lots of people do this. In addition, there is a lot of information about what to eat and it is not difficult or expensive to eat healthy food. The whole subject gets a lot of publicity in the media. As a result of all this, many people find it easy to stay fit and healthy. In conclusion, it is very easy for a lot of people to have unhealthy lifestyles and this can cause medical problems because they can eventually require some kinds of medical treatment, which puts more pressure on the medical profession. On the other hand, it is not at all difficult for people to avoid these problems by taking regular exercise and eating healthy food.
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find it easy to stay fit and healthy.

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to avoid these problems by taking regular exercise and eating healthy
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IELTS essay Some people say that in the modern world it is very difficult for people to have a healthy lifestyle. Others, however, say that it is easy to be healthy and fit if they want to be.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
334 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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