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Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. KB0w
It is often argued that the education system from primary to post-graduate emphasis greater on theoretic than actual practical work. This essay agrees with the statement because it brings limited benefits to pupils. Firstly, this essay will look at how practical skills help students to be creative. Secondly, how practical skilled-based learning encouraged in the corporate world. Education should not be limited to strictly follow the course plan and acquiring new knowledge, it is more than that. However, the education system investing more on content-based learning from junior to senior level. As a result, we are doing nothing but depreciating creativity in the new generation. For example, the education system in Pakistan is more theoretic-based and unable to produce great scientists, technologist, s and entrepreneurs. Whereas, in the United Kingdom, the education is more skilled-based. In professional exams, you would be able to pass the exams or graduate until or unless you have done an equally good practical assignment. Eventually, the British graduates are more ready to go out in the market and showcase their skills. On the other hand, there are quite evident benefits of practical skilled-based learning in the corporate world. In other words, employers not only hire those with great degrees/certificates but also the ones with good practical skills. Nobody, in the corporate world, wants to jeopardise their business by hiring a new graduate and depend on him/her. Nowadays, in the current economic situation after the COVID-19 it is a battle of the fittest. For example, I am now extremely reluctant to hire new graduates but when I do, I must be convinced that the candidate possesses extraordinary hands-on skills. In conclusion, it is important for pupils to learn all theories and facts. However, experimental learning should be encouraged more. In opinion, without having practical skill a new graduate can not express him/herself in a real practical world where he/she must showcase the talent and make living out of it.
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argued that the
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system from primary to post-graduate emphasis greater on theoretic than actual
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practical
work. This essay
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agrees
with the statement
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because
it brings limited benefits to pupils.
Firstly
, this essay will look at how
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practical
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skills
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help
students to be creative.
Secondly
, how
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practical
skilled-based
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learning
encouraged in the corporate world.

Education should not
be limited
to
strictly
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follow the course
plan and acquiring
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new
knowledge, it is more than that.
However
, the
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education
system investing more on content-based
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learning
from junior to senior level.
As a result
, we are doing nothing
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but
depreciating creativity in the
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new
generation.
For example
, the
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education
system in Pakistan is more theoretic-based and unable to produce great scientists, technologist, s and entrepreneurs. Whereas, in the United Kingdom, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
is more skilled-based. In professional exams, you would be able to pass the exams or
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graduate
until or unless you have done an
equally
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good
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practical
assignment.
Eventually
, the British
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graduates
are more ready to go out in the market and showcase their
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skills
.

On the other hand
, there are quite evident benefits of
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practical
skilled-based
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learning
in the corporate world.
In other words
, employers not
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only
hire those with great degrees/certificates
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but
also
the ones with
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good
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practical
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skills
. Nobody, in the corporate world, wants to
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jeopardise
their business by hiring a
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new
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graduate
and depend on him/her. Nowadays, in the
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current
economic situation after the COVID-19 it is a battle of the fittest.
For example
, I am
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now
extremely
reluctant to hire
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new
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graduates
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but
when I do, I
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must
be convinced
that the candidate possesses extraordinary hands-on
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skills
.

In conclusion
, it is
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important
for pupils to learn all theories and facts.
However
, experimental
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learning
should
be encouraged
more. In opinion, without having
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practical
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skill
a
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new
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graduate
can not express him/herself in a real
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practical
world where he/she
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must
showcase the talent and
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make
living out of it.
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IELTS essay Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
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