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Some people say that Government should break down all the historic building and replace them with modern buildings. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that Government should break down all the historic building and replace them with modern buildings. nypP
A part of Society consider to push governments to destroy of heritage building to modern style. Personally, I strongly agree, heritage building could be symbolism for violence and colonialism as soon as possible government have beneficial to install the new structure in historical site. Nowadays, old structures tend to remembering some teenagers to be traumatized, this is because there are records and give an awareness to people how some country colonialists and torturing the slaves. 70% heritage structure in Indonesia is old structures of former colonial building from British, Dutch and Japan like “Kota Tua & Lobang Japan”. Take my experience example when I brought my nephew to vocation at Lobang Japanfor the first moments, she was afraid and blasphemous Japanese treatment. How could be old Japanesedoing violence with Indonesian people? Therefore, I believe that if government applied to crush the old building, so theirs will construct generations without traumatic experience. Given its continued reasoning, why it is vital, my view, to continue that government could be using those side to enhance economic locations for increasing local income, for instance, the neglected building in west Sumatera was replaced with a local market, proving the rose up around 80% economic local revenue, these was reported from Sumatera Post. This mean it introduces to open the jobs opportunities in that area. If this opportunity used by government sustainable way, more and more people have the jobs and declining rate poverty. In conclusion, demolishing historical building could be reduced traumatic level by younger, and it also grows the economic opportunities for local people.
A part of Society consider to push
governments
to
destroy
of heritage
building
to modern style.
Personally
, I
strongly
agree
, heritage
building
could be symbolism for violence and colonialism as
soon
as possible
government
have beneficial to install the new
structure
in historical site.

Nowadays,
old
structures
tend to remembering
some
teenagers
to
be traumatized
, this is
because
there are records and give an awareness to
people
how
some
country colonialists and torturing the slaves. 70% heritage
structure
in Indonesia is
old
structures
of former colonial
building
from British, Dutch and Japan like “
Kota
Tua
&
Lobang
Japan”. Take my experience example when I brought my nephew to vocation at
Lobang
Japanfor
the
first
moments, she was afraid and blasphemous Japanese treatment. How could be
old
Japanesedoing
violence with Indonesian
people
?
Therefore
, I believe that if
government
applied to crush the
old
building
,
so
theirs will construct generations without traumatic experience.

Given
its continued reasoning, why it is vital, my view, to continue that
government
could be using those side to enhance economic locations for increasing
local
income,
for instance
, the neglected
building
in west
Sumatera
was replaced
with a
local
market, proving the rose up around 80% economic
local
revenue, these
was reported
from
Sumatera
Post. This mean it introduces to open the jobs opportunities in that area. If this opportunity
used
by
government
sustainable way, more and more
people
have the jobs and declining rate poverty.

In conclusion
, demolishing historical
building
could be
reduced
traumatic level by younger, and it
also
grows the economic opportunities for
local
people
.
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IELTS essay Some people say that Government should break down all the historic building and replace them with modern buildings.

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