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Some people say that E- books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

advantages of conferring rewards to children first of all, appreciation and verbal praise can have a magical impact on the behavior of the children because when they are appreciated for good conduct they come to know about value of good behavior and try to keep continue with that. The more they brim with positive comments, the more they are confident. On the other hand, children who are subjected to artificial physical punishment are seen with lack of self confidence. A survey conducted on behavior of children revealed that a child exposed to punitive actions my parents are more aggressive and furious than others of his age. Hence beatings to child can never be fruitful. On the contrary, there is no denying the fact that training to the notorious and ferocious mind is a hard nut to crack because it is true that rod the only logic for the fools. Moreover, some children repeat mistakes even after being warned and punished, this type of stubbornness force parents and guardians to give them beatings. Needless to say, over pampering may have adverse effect on children. In this present scenario, parents have one or two children and this pampering distract them away from their path. To conclude, children are the tender buds and nurturing them is really a major responsibility. Therefore, a fair judgment on
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advantages
of conferring rewards to
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first of all
, appreciation and verbal praise can have a magical impact on the behavior of the
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children
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when they
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good
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good
behavior and try to
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continue with that. The more they brim with
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comments, the more they are confident.
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self confidence
. A survey conducted on behavior of
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revealed that a child exposed to punitive actions my parents are more aggressive and furious than others of his age.
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Hence
beatings to child can never be fruitful.

On the contrary
, there is no denying the fact that training to the notorious and ferocious mind is a
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hard
nut to crack
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because
it is true that rod the
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only
logic for the fools.
Moreover
,
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some
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children
repeat mistakes even after
being warned
and punished, this type of stubbornness force parents and guardians to give them beatings. Needless to say, over pampering may have adverse effect on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
. In this present scenario, parents have one or two
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children
and this pampering distract them away from their path.

To conclude
,
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children
are the tender buds and nurturing them is
really
a major responsibility.
Therefore
, a
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fair
judgment on
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IELTS essay Some people say that E- books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
221 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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