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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful atcpersuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful atcpersuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it xyPa
Nowadays, advertisement is spreading everywhere from social media to busses. Some indivuduals feel that advertising is very essential for people which it helps people purchase something. And others' opinion that advertising is losing its relevance. In my opinion, advertisement keep its balance always. On the one hand, people focuse on advertising things which advertising gain social media from internet website to tv. As a result, now a lot of advertising agencies have been formed than previos time. These agencies play a huge role in people life. Moreover, Advertisements are very diversity so agencies help to determine of people choices. Furthermore, the newly produced items are not yet familiar to anyone. And advertising introduced it to the world of humanity. Advertising explains its features, what are its benefits. Consequently, individuals trust advertising and pay more attention to it. On the other hand, there are so many advertisement, there are both quality and poor quality stuff in them. This is couse that people do not to beliave. And individuals avoid advertising items. If I take an axample my life, the sweet "okeyk" was so well featured in the advertising that i really wanted to eat it. Then i went to store and bought it. Unfortunately, it was quite different from that it showed in the advertising. And these situations experience a lot od advertising. Because, advertising is interested in money, not to qualities. In fact, function of advertisements is to make simple things look great. To conclude, advertisement is very comfortable in ever way but this is incorrect for others. I think, people should relay on their own minds which buy something
Nowadays,
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advertisement
is spreading everywhere from social media to busses.
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Some
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indivuduals
feel that advertising is
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very
essential for
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people
which it
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helps
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people
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purchase
something.
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And others
' opinion that advertising is losing its relevance. In my opinion,
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advertisement
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keep
its balance
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always
. On the one hand,
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people
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focuse on
advertising things which advertising gain social media from internet website to
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tv
.
As a result
,
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now
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a lot of
advertising agencies have
been formed
than
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previos
time. These agencies play a huge role in
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people
life.
Moreover
,
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Advertisements
are
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very
diversity
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so
agencies
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help
to determine of
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people
choices.
Furthermore
, the
newly
produced items are not
yet
familiar to anyone. And advertising introduced it to the world of humanity. Advertising
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explains
its features, what are its benefits.
Consequently
, individuals trust advertising and pay more attention to it.
On the other hand
, there are
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so
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many
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advertisement
, there are both quality and poor quality stuff in them. This is
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couse
that
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people
do not to
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beliave
. And individuals avoid advertising items. If I take an
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axample
my life, the sweet
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"
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okeyk
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"
was
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so
well featured in the advertising that
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i
really
wanted to eat it. Then
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i
went to store and
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bought
it. Unfortunately, it was quite
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different
from that it
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showed
in the advertising. And these situations experience a lot
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od
advertising.
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Because
, advertising
is interested
in money, not to qualities. In fact, function of
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advertisements
is to
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make
simple things look great.
To conclude
,
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advertisement
is
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very
comfortable in ever way
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but
this is incorrect for others. I
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think
,
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people
should relay on their
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own
minds which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
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IELTS essay Some people say that advertising is extremely successful atcpersuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
269 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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