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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Advertisement industry has grown drastically and has influence on many people towards buying things, while others argue that adverts has become very common that rarely anyone pay attention to it. In this essay I will discuss both the views, however, in my opinion, advertisement have major influenced people to buy things. On one hand, advertisement has become common medium to sale the products and services due to which many ads are displayed everywhere in the form of commercial advertisement. For instance, in order to promote any products or services, many ads would be shown while watching a movie or daily shop. Additionally, ads would be displayed on social networking sites. In 21st century, due to hectic schedules, hardly anyone gives importance to the advertisement. On the flip side, with the unprecedented development in the field of science and technology, the way of advertisement have tremendously changed and improvised. Previously people used to visit the place personally where the products are being sold in order to understand the feathers of the different products and then after comparing similar products they come to final decision. However, with the advertisement people tends to buy the same product of which they have seen the ad. Moreover, by making a public figure as a brand ambassador in the advertisement, this have great influence on the people and hence the sales of the product will increase. The best example for this would be the brand dove soap, showing comparison between an ordinary soap and dove, it creates an impression that dove is the best soap in the world. Additionally, assigning Disha Patani, a famous actress, people have a false notion and believe that actress uses the same soap. In conclusion, although it might be a pain those who are not willing to buy the product, adverts being the best method of promoting products and services, it does influence people in buying the products. Advancement in the advertisement are done at a very good pace and will continue to develop in coming years.
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industry has grown
drastically
and has influence on
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many
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people
towards buying things, while others argue that adverts has become
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very
common that

rarely anyone pay attention to it. In this essay I will discuss both the views,
however
, in my opinion,
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advertisement
have major influenced
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people
to
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buy
things.

On one hand,
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advertisement
has become common medium to sale the
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products
and services due to which
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many
ads
are displayed
everywhere in the form of commercial
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advertisement
.
For instance
, in order to promote any
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products
or services,
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many
ads would
be shown
while watching a movie or daily shop.
Additionally
, ads would
be displayed
on social networking sites. In 21st century, due to hectic schedules, hardly anyone gives importance to the advertisement.

On the flip side, with the unprecedented development in the field of science and technology, the way of
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advertisement
have
tremendously
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changed
and improvised. Previously
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people
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used
to visit the place
personally
where the
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products
are
being sold
in order to understand the feathers of the
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different
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products
and then after comparing

similar
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products
they
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come
to final decision.
However
, with the
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advertisement
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people
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tends
to
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buy
the same
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product
of which they have
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seen
the ad.
Moreover
, by making a public figure as a brand ambassador in the
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,
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this have
great influence on the
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people
and
hence
the sales of the
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product
will increase. The best example for this would be the brand dove soap, showing comparison between an ordinary soap and dove, it creates an impression that dove is the best soap in the world.
Additionally
, assigning
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Disha
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Patani
, a
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famous
actress,
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people
have a false notion and believe that actress
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uses
the same soap.

In conclusion
, although it might be a pain those who are not willing to
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buy
the
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product
, adverts being the best method of promoting
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products
and services, it does influence
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people
in buying the
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products
. Advancement in the
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advertisement
are done
at a
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very
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good
pace and will continue to develop in coming years.
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IELTS essay Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
6.0
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