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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. kYgQM
Nowadays, the internet is well developed as a result of this advertising is also involved in interacting people. However, some people believe that majorityof advertising are shown frequently, so that they do not pay attention to it. In the paragraphs below, I will try to explain people's thoughts about it. On one hand, today advertising more developed due to that attracts attention of majority of internet users. Therefore it increases the sales of the product of entrepreneurs than in the past. Nevertheless, to be attract it has to follow some requirements of social media and also should have some tactics like colorfulness, hypnotizing tricks and has to be easy to understand the product, because not every advertiser can make the advertising understandable. In addition, TV advertisement beyond the shadow of doubt are also popular, most like among people who have sedentary lifestyle, because it can be shown more than ten times a day. Doubtless, we cannot deny that it is annoying at times to repetitive the same advertisements. After a certain frequencies, they start getting boring and stop paying attention to ads. From the surveys of most YouTube users, the ads are commonly shown frequently and bother people, we can see ads every where even reading arcticles or newspapers, because they specifically devote advertising space. In conclusion, ads can be successful in persuading people to purchase goods, but also can be unsuccessful in many cases. In order to be attractive, they must be well-designed and presented in the correct way.
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well developed
as a result
of this advertising is
also
involved in interacting
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people
.
However
,
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some
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people
believe that
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majorityof
advertising
are shown
frequently
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so
that they do not pay attention to it. In the paragraphs below, I will try to
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explain
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people
's thoughts about it. On one hand,
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today
advertising more developed due to that attracts attention of
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majority of
internet users.
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Therefore
it increases the sales of the product of entrepreneurs than in the past.
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attract
it
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has to
follow
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some
requirements of social media and
also
should have
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some
tactics like colorfulness, hypnotizing tricks and
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has to
be easy to understand the product,
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because
not every advertiser can
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make
the advertising understandable.
In addition
, TV advertisement beyond the shadow of doubt are
also
popular, most like among
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people
who have sedentary lifestyle,
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because
it can
be shown
more than ten times a day. Doubtless, we cannot deny that it is annoying at times to repetitive the same advertisements. After a certain
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frequencies
, they
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start
getting boring and
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stop
paying attention to ads. From the surveys of most YouTube users, the ads are
commonly
shown
frequently
and bother
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people
, we can
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see
ads
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every where
even reading
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arcticles
or newspapers,
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because
they
specifically
devote advertising space.
In conclusion
, ads can be successful in persuading
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people
to
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purchase
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goods
,
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but
also
can be unsuccessful in
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many
cases. In order to be attractive, they
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must
be well-designed and presented in the correct way.
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IELTS essay Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
250 words
5.5
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