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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. EQGb
In this concurrent world, it is undoubtedly true that what you see is sold. Attracting advertisement is the key of the success for marketing and getting customer’s eyeballs. Some people concur that it is waste of time and money on advertisement nowadays. However, I quibble from them and propound that I firmly agree with the statement. In this era, it’s become necessary to representation of the product for selling and advertisement perform a huge roll in marketing. Various evidences can be given to bolster my stand. The top-notch concrete reason is people follows their ideals whereas they are actors, sportsman, youth icon or whomsoever. They buy the products which advertised by their favorite person because they believe in them that they don’t advertised the wrong products which can cause any harm to their follower. So most of the companies hired the film actors for their product’s advertisement and it seems successful now on. Another rational which hauls me to patron is competition in each and every products. There are numerous of products from the different companies. In this case, which products catch customer’s eyeballs has merits because customers only become aware of the product from the advertisement through the television or social media or newspapers etc. The rearmost factor to be considered which cannot be neglected is the greedy advertisement. When the advertisement are very temptation then only the customers persuade towards the product. Some companies advertised their quality about their products to tempting the customers. What is half full for some, may appear half empty to others. So the public tend to distinguish that advertising has no future for selling the products and affectivity of the advertisement is no longer attracts the customers which has multifarious reasons. To commence with, some people deem that companies are advertising the wrong details for their products which lead the generation to wrong path. In recapitulation, I reiterate that there are innumerable strong factors supporting the advertisement concept. However it’s can be overlooked or controlled. Consequently I firmly agree to the given statement.
In this concurrent world, it is
undoubtedly
true that what you
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see
is sold
. Attracting
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advertisement
is the key of the success for marketing and getting
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customer’s
eyeballs.
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Some
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people
concur that it is waste of time and money on
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advertisement
nowadays.
However
, I quibble from them and propound that I
firmly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the statement.

In this era, it’s become necessary to representation of the
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product
for selling and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
perform a huge roll in marketing. Various evidences can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to bolster my stand. The top-notch concrete reason is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
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follows
their ideals whereas they are actors, sportsman, youth icon or whomsoever. They
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buy
the
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products
which advertised by their favorite person
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because
they believe in them that they don’t advertised the
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wrong
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products
which can cause any harm to their follower.
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So
most of the
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companies
hired the film actors for their
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product’s
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advertisement
and it seems successful
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now
on. Another rational which hauls me to patron is competition in each and every
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "product"?
products
. There are numerous of
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products
from the
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different
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companies
.
In this case
, which
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products
catch
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customer’s
eyeballs has merits
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because
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customers
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only
become aware of the
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product
from the
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advertisement
through the television or social media or newspapers etc. The rearmost factor to
be considered
which cannot
be neglected
is the greedy
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advertisement
.
“When” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
When
the
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advertisement
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are
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very
temptation then
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only
the
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customers
persuade towards the
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product
.
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Some
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companies
advertised their quality about their
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products
to tempting the customers.

What is half full for
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some
, may appear half empty to others.
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So
the public tend to distinguish that advertising has no future for selling the
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products
and
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affectivity
of the
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advertisement
is no longer attracts the
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customers
which has multifarious reasons. To commence with,
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some
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people
deem that
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companies
are advertising the
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wrong
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details
for their
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products
which lead the generation to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
path.

In recapitulation, I reiterate that there are innumerable strong factors supporting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
concept.
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However
it’s can
be overlooked
or controlled.
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Consequently
I
firmly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
to the
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given
statement.
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IELTS essay Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
340 words
6.0
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